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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v.8

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v. 8
The line chart depicts the consumption of fish and various kinds of meat in a European country in the time interval of 25 years. The striking feature of the chart is substantially decreased in the consumption of beef At a fleeting glance, it is observed that fish consumption was 60 grams per person in 1979 which lowers by 25 grams in the next two decades. Likewise, after 5 years, the consumption remained same. However, individuals took 150 grams of lamb in 1979 which diminished to a greater extent by several ups and downs and left only 65 grams per person. Not only this, after went through numerous fluctuations, there was a considerable decrement in the consumption of beef which remained almost half of it. On the contrary, intake of chicken steadily dominated the trend and enhanced its consumption by 140 grams per person in the concerned period. All-in-all, maximum people consumed chicken while remaining individuals devoted less interest to the beef and lamb. Moreover, there was a consistency in the fish inhalation.
The line chart depicts the
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consumption
of fish and various kinds of meat in a European country in the time interval of 25 years. The striking feature of the chart is
substantially
decreased in the
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consumption
of
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beef


At a fleeting glance, it
is observed
that fish
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consumption
was 60
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grams
per person in 1979 which lowers by 25
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grams
in the
next
two decades.
Likewise
, after 5 years, the
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consumption
remained same.
However
, individuals took 150
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grams
of lamb in 1979 which diminished to a greater extent by several ups and downs and
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left
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only
65
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grams
per person.

Not
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only
this, after went through numerous fluctuations, there was a considerable decrement in the
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consumption
of beef which remained almost half of it.
On the contrary
, intake of chicken
steadily
dominated the trend and enhanced its
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consumption
by 140
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grams
per person in the concerned period.

All-in-all, maximum
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people
consumed chicken while remaining individuals devoted less interest to the beef and lamb.
Moreover
, there was a consistency in the fish inhalation.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v. 8

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4 paragraphs
172 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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