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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v.6

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v. 6
The supplied graph demonstrates fish and meat intake in a European country over a quarter-century, between 1979 and 2004. In general, fish and several kinds of meat consumption per person per week outlined a decrease, however, chicken intake showed a rise. Looking at the detail, fish was the least consumed over the year observed and remained the lowest among other meat items. Fish started about 60 grammes per person in 1979 and slightly decreased to less than 50 grammes per week in 2004. The same trend was true for lamb and beef consumption which was about 150 grammes and 210 grammes respectively in 1979 and gradually spiked to about 70 grammes and 130 grammes per person per week in 2004 respectively. Although there were some fluctuations and beef was the most favourable meat in 1979, they ended up with a decline in 2004. On the other hand, chicken intake obviously pointed out an increase. It significantly swelled from about 140 grammes in 1979 to about 240 grammes per person in 2004. It accounted for about 100 grammes improved during the period observed.
The supplied graph demonstrates fish and
meat
intake in a European country over a quarter-century, between 1979 and 2004.
In general
, fish and several kinds of
meat
consumption per
person
per week outlined a decrease,
however
, chicken intake
showed
a rise.

Looking at the detail, fish was the least consumed over the year observed and remained the lowest among other
meat
items. Fish
started
about 60
grammes
per
person
in 1979 and
slightly
decreased to less than 50
grammes
per week in 2004. The same trend was true for lamb and beef consumption which was about 150
grammes
and 210
grammes
respectively
in 1979 and
gradually
spiked to about 70
grammes
and 130
grammes
per
person
per week in 2004
respectively
. Although there were
some
fluctuations and beef was the most
favourable
meat
in 1979, they ended up with a decline in 2004.

On the other hand
, chicken intake
obviously
pointed out an increase. It
significantly
swelled from about 140
grammes
in 1979 to about 240
grammes
per
person
in 2004. It accounted for about 100
grammes
improved
during the period observed.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v. 6

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