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The graph below shows the comparison between the number of applicants and the number of students who were granted admission. v.3

The graph below shows the comparison between the number of applicants and the number of students who were granted admission. v. 3
The column graph illustrates about the number of application and the number of successful candidates. Every year we can find that the applicant numbers are higher than the seats. In 1993 we can see a few candidates applied and a well number of applicants also selected. On the other hand, In 1994, 1995 we find a great differences between the applicants and the successful students. In 1993 almost 200 applicants applied and near about 150 students successfully admitted but In 1994 and 1995 respectively 600 and just over 1000 students applied and only a few number of students could confirm their seats which was respectively 300 and 350. Besides, on 1996 to 1999 there is a very dramatically differences between the applicants and successful candidates. In 1996 to 1999 probably just over 500 candidates could successful for getting admission but it is a matter of fact, among those years the rate of unsuccessful candidates increased dramatically and those were respectively in 1996 just under 2000, in 1997 the rate was 2300, in 1998 it was exactly 2500 and in 1999 it approx just over 2500. Moreover, on the year among 2000 to 2003 we can find out the same case that happened few last years. The applicants rates becoming higher and higher, nut the successful applicants were only a few. On 2000 approximately 3200, in 2001 the rate of applicants not so change which was 3300, in 2002 it was just over 4000 and in 2003 the number of applicants were just under 4500. In addition, only 600 candidates successed among those years. To sum up, overall, we can find that the rate of applicants was growing higher than the applicants who could successfully get admissions.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the comparison between the number of applicants and the number of students who were granted admission. v. 3

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