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The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people. v.2

The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people. v. 2
The diagram describes a survey result of 1000 teenagers about at what age they should follow particular rights and responsibilities. The survey has been conducted in five different nationalities on three categories such as marriage, voting, and criminal responsibility. The survey result shows that American and Mexican participants have likely the same opinion. Americans agreed that marriage and voting right should be given at the same age (18) but criminal responsibility at a younger age. American teenagers believed that criminal responsibility should be given at about twelve years old. British and Japanese adolescents agreed that rights of marriage should be granted at an older age than other subjects.   Afterwards, teenagers in the UK agreed that certain responsibilities should be granted within 18 years old but Japanese believe those should be suitable for over 18 years old. Only Egyptians agreed that voting should be granted at an older age than other categories. In short, all teenagers from five different countries have a different agreement of what age should the young people be granted on certain rights. Only Japanese believe that they should get those rights at above 18 years old while others within 18 years old.
The diagram
describes
a survey result of 1000
teenagers
about at what
age
they should follow particular
rights
and
responsibilities
. The survey has
been conducted
in five
different
nationalities on three categories such as marriage, voting, and criminal responsibility.

The
survey result
shows
that American and Mexican participants have likely the same opinion. Americans
agreed
that marriage and voting
right
should be
given
at the same
age
(18)
but
criminal
responsibility
at a younger
age
. American
teenagers
believed that criminal
responsibility
should be
given
at about twelve years
old
. British and Japanese adolescents
agreed
that
rights
of marriage should be
granted
at an older
age
than other subjects.
 
Afterwards,
teenagers
in the UK
agreed
that certain
responsibilities
should be
granted
within 18 years
old
but
Japanese believe those should be suitable for over 18 years
old
.
Only
Egyptians
agreed
that voting should be
granted
at an older
age
than other categories.

In short, all
teenagers
from five
different
countries have a
different
agreement of what
age
should the young
people
be
granted
on certain
rights
.
Only
Japanese believe that they should
get
those
rights
at above 18 years
old
while others within 18 years
old
.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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