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The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university. Summarize the information by s v.2

The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.
The Bar graphs illustrate the count of applicants a year before and after Doolittle University’s social media campaign arranged by age group and the distance they live from the University. Overall, the increase in the number of applications has been increased in all the cases except the middle age groups of students who live more than 100KM from Doolittle University. On analysing the applicants who live within 100KMS from the University. On the one hand, a slight increase can be noted in 18 to 22 and 23 to 29 age groups as applicants increased from 380 to 390, 170 to 180 respectively. On the other hand, Noticeable changes can be observed in both 30- 39, 40 and above the age people as there is a considerable increase as 40 to 70, 10 to 50 respectively. While considering applications further 100kms and above, dramatic growth can be observed in young age people from less than 200 to more than 300. In the case of old applicants, a modest increase is found from 5 to 10 approximately. In contrast, in both groups of medium age, a number of applications got dropped slightly.
The Bar graphs illustrate the count of
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age
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and the distance they
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from the University.

Overall
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age
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groups
of students who
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more than 100KM from Doolittle University.

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within 100KMS from the University. On the one hand, a slight
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increase
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in 18 to 22 and 23 to 29
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age
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groups
as
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increased from 380 to 390, 170 to 180
respectively
.
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the other hand, Noticeable
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changes
can
be observed
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30- 39
, 40 and above the
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age
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people
as there is a considerable
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as 40 to 70, 10 to 50
respectively
.

While considering applications
further
100kms and above, dramatic growth can
be observed
in young
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age
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people
from less than 200 to more than 300. In the case of
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old
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applicants
, a modest
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increase
is found
from 5 to 10 approximately.
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groups
of medium
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age
, a number of applications
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got
dropped
slightly
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IELTS academic The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.

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190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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