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THE GRAPH BELLOW SHOWS THE POPULATION FIGURES FOR DIFFERENT TYPE OF TURTLES IN INDIA FROM 1980 TO 2012 v.1

THE GRAPH BELLOW SHOWS THE POPULATION FIGURES FOR DIFFERENT TYPE OF TURTLES IN INDIA FROM 1980 TO 2012 v. 1
The graph line illustrates four types of turtle population figures in India for 32 years period, starting from 1980, by index (1980=100). Overall, it is clear from the graph, that leatherback and green turtles, all species and olive riddle turtles started at the same unit and fluctuated, experiencing increase, drastic fall and steep changes. All 4 types of turtle populations started at the same unit in 1980 and met each other in the same point till 1996. In the mentioned year, the leatherback turtles slightly increased up to 110 point of index and declined sharply after it. In 1998, it met the green turtles in the 100 unit pattern and dramatically dropped till 55 in 2008, experiencing a slight increase till 60 point towards the end of the graph. In contrast Olive Ridley turtles experienced a drastic leap, reaching to its peak of 140 point of index in 1997. After fluctuating it had a slight drop and most strikingly, it kept the highest 130 pattern at the end of the graph. Conversely, green turtles and all species fluctuated and met again in 1993 with 100 units respectively. The latter dropped relatively in 2003 to merely 85 point of index and ended its result with 90 point of index in 2012. Meanwhile, all species experiences a steep increase to 110 point of index towards the end of the graph.
The
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line illustrates four types of
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turtle
population figures in India for 32

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years
period, starting from 1980, by
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index
(1980=100).

Overall
, it is
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clear
from the
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, that
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leatherback
and green
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turtles
, all species

and olive riddle
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turtles
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started
at the same
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unit
and fluctuated, experiencing

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increase
, drastic fall and steep
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changes
.

All 4 types of
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turtle
populations
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started
at the same
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unit
in 1980 and met each

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other
in the same
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point
till 1996. In the mentioned year, the
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leatherback
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turtles


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slightly
increased up to 110
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point
of
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index
and declined
sharply
after it. In 1998,
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it


met the green
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turtles
in the 100
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unit
pattern and
dramatically
dropped till 55 in

2008, experiencing a slight increase till 60
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point
towards the
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end
of the
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. In

contrast Olive
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Ridley
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experienced a drastic leap, reaching to its peak of

140
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point
of
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index
in 1997. After fluctuating it had a slight drop and
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most


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strikingly
, it
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kept
the highest 130
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pattern
at the
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end
of the graph.

Conversely
, green
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turtles
and all species fluctuated and met again in 1993 with

100
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units
respectively
. The latter dropped
relatively
in 2003 to
merely
85
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point
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of


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index
and ended its result with 90
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point
of
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index
in 2012. Meanwhile, all species

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experiences
a steep increase to 110
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point
of
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index
towards the
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.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS academic THE GRAPH BELLOW SHOWS THE POPULATION FIGURES FOR DIFFERENT TYPE OF TURTLES IN INDIA FROM 1980 TO 2012 v. 1

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17 paragraphs
228 words
5.5
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