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The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people. v.1

The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people. v. 1
The provided column graph summarises the result of a study and indicates what people in five different countries think to be the appropriate age to be allowed to have certain rights and responsibilities. Generally speaking, citizens’ opinion regarding the right age for marriage, voting and prosecution for crime greatly varies. As is given in the illustration, people in Japan and the UK opine that they should not marry until they are at least 20 years old while Americans believe that this age should be exactly 18. On the contrary, Mexicans and Egyptians agreed that they should be allowed to get married just after they cross 15. In terms of the voting power, Japanese state that 20 years is the right age for them while Americans and Egyptians express it should be 18. Both British and Mexicans want their voting right at 16 years, on the contrary. Finally, American people give their opinion that someone should be charged by the law for committing any crime when they become 12 years old. Japanese seems like have a different opinion as they believe that someone should not be imposed with criminal offence until they turn 18 years. Survey participants in other three countries expressed that before 14 they should not be punished by law for any misdeed.
The provided column graph
summarises
the result of a study and indicates what
people
in five
different
countries
think
to be the appropriate
age
to be
allowed
to have certain
rights
and responsibilities.
Generally
speaking, citizens’ opinion regarding the
right
age
for marriage, voting and prosecution for crime
greatly
varies.

As is
given
in the illustration,
people
in Japan and the UK opine that they should not marry until they are at least 20 years
old
while Americans believe that this
age
should be exactly 18.
On the contrary
, Mexicans and Egyptians
agreed
that they should be
allowed
to
get
married
just
after they cross 15. In terms of the voting power, Japanese state that 20 years is the
right
age
for them while Americans and Egyptians express it should be 18. Both British and Mexicans want their voting
right
at 16 years,
on the contrary
.

Finally
, American
people
give their opinion that someone should
be charged
by the law for committing any crime when they become 12 years
old
. Japanese seems like have a
different
opinion as they believe that someone should not
be imposed
with criminal
offence
until they turn 18 years. Survey participants in other three countries expressed that
before
14 they should not
be punished
by law for any misdeed.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people. v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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