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The map billow is of the town of Garlsdon and shows two possible sites for a new super market. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The map billow is of the town of Garlsdon and shows two possible sites for a new super market.
The map highlights not only the town of Garlsdon but also shows two possible sites for a new supermarket. Here two places is indecate for making the supermarket. One of them is on the country side and the another is on the town center where is no traffic zone. We can see in main roads as well as railway accrose behind S1 site but in S2 site the railway goes over it. There have some industries as well as housing near both of the sites too. The Hindon where almost 10000 people live is very near from the S1 part. On the other hand the S2 part is also near from Bransdon and Cransdon too. Near about 15000 and 29000 people live to those area. At the sum the two possible sites are different from eachother.
The map highlights not
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only
the town of
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Garlsdon
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but
also
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shows
two possible
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sites
for a new supermarket.

Here two places is
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indecate
for making the supermarket. One of them is on the country side and the another is on the town center where is no traffic zone. We can
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see
in main roads
as well
as railway
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accrose
behind S1
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site
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but
in S2
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site
the railway goes over it. There have
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some
industries
as well
as housing
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near
both of the
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sites
too. The
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Hindon
where almost 10000
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people
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live
is
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very
The usual collocation for "near" is "to" not "from". Did you mean simply "near to" or "further from"?
near from the
S1 part.
On the other hand
the S2 part is
also
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near from Bransdon
and
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Cransdon
too.
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Near
about 15000 and 29000
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people
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live
to
Did you mean "this area" or "those areas"?
those area
.

At the sum the two possible
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sites
are
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different
from
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eachother
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS academic The map billow is of the town of Garlsdon and shows two possible sites for a new super market.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
136 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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