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The diagrams bellow shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The diagrams bellow shows the life cycle of the honey bee.
The picture deals with the life cycle of an insect which is called honey bee. We can see the honey bees pass six steps for being mature. At first, female bees lay one or two eggs in every three days and those eggs are looking like oval shape. After nine or ten days the eggs hatch and its divert into nymph, which is an immature form of an insect as well. Besides, on the day of either 16th or 17th its start first moulting. On the other hand, after first moulting they take more 7 days for going in the second moulting. This stage is very important stage for a honey bee because after passing this stage they become young and adult. Probably, on the day of 15th they are being adult as well as they also take more four days for being mature. Overall, the insect name honey bee takes almost 34 to 36 days not only being adult but also it can get full freedom in its life after passing those days successfully.
The picture deals with the life cycle of an insect which
is called
honey bee.

We can
see
the honey bees pass six steps for being mature. At
first
, female bees lay one or two eggs in every three days and those eggs are looking like oval shape. After nine or ten days the eggs hatch and its divert into nymph, which is an immature form of an insect
as well
.
Besides
, on the day of either 16th or 17th its
start
first
moulting
.
On the other hand
, after
first
moulting
they take more 7 days for going in the second
moulting
. This stage is
very
important
stage for a honey bee
because
after passing this stage they become young and adult.
Probably
, on the day of 15th they are being adult
as well
as they
also
take more four days for being mature.

Overall
, the insect name honey bee takes almost 34 to 36 days not
only
being adult
but
also
it can
get
full freedom in its life after passing those days
successfully
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagrams bellow shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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