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The table below shows the leisure hours by Canadians in a year based on their age groups. v.1

The table below shows the leisure hours by Canadians in a year based on their age groups. v. 1
The table reveals data on the duration of yearly leisure activities by Canadians based on their age groups. As is obvious from the illustration, watching TV is the most popular free time activity among Canadians while young people take parts in sports and exercise more than older people do. In details, a Canadian teenager spends 1200 hours watching TV programmes in a year which is 100 hours more than that of people over 70 years old and three times than that of people in their thirties. Hours spend watching TV by teens and older people are higher than that of other age groups. Individual exercise is more popular among Canadians between 30 and 50 years as they spend 200 hours in a year, while group exercise and sports are more preferred by younger people. People over 60 do not take part in sports and groups exercise. Socialising with more people is commonly seen among younger people while adults like to have fewer people to socialise. Cinema seems like the least preferred activity as roughly 75 hours on an average is spend on this activity by all age groups.
The table reveals data on the duration of yearly leisure
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activities
by Canadians based on their age
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groups
. As is obvious from the illustration, watching TV is the most popular free time
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activity
among Canadians while young
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people
take parts in sports and
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exercise
more than older
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people
do.

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, a Canadian
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teenager
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spends
1200
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hours
watching TV
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programmes
in a
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year
which is 100
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hours
more than that of
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people
over 70 years
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old
and three times than that of
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people
in their thirties.
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Hours
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spend
watching TV by teens and older
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people
are higher than that of other age
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groups
. Individual
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exercise
is more popular among Canadians between 30 and 50 years as they
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spend
200
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hours
in a
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year
, while
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group
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exercise
and sports are more preferred by younger
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people
.
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People
over 60 do not
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take part
in sports and
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groups
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exercise
.
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Socialising
with more
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people
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is
commonly
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seen
among younger
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people
while adults like to have fewer
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people
to
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socialise
. Cinema seems like the least preferred
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activity
as roughly 75
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hours
on an average is
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spend
on this
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activity
by all age
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groups
.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows the leisure hours by Canadians in a year based on their age groups. v. 1

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
188 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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