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The Graph below shows the averaged results for one of the two school trials, illustrating the substantial difference in growth rate between egg chickens and meat chickens. v.2

The Graph below shows the averaged results for one of the two school trials, illustrating the substantial difference in growth rate between egg chickens and meat chickens. v. 2
Overall, the average weight for meat chicken and layer chicken rose as the age of the chickens increased, especially after a month; the weight of both chickens grew significantly. The average weight for the meat chicken is higher than that of layer chickens. Both chicken types grew in its mean weight significantly as the age is matured, in particular after 34 days, where the average weight grew substantially for meat chickens. The meat chicken tripled its weight from over 500 grams in 20th days to over 1500 grams within fortnights, whereas the weight of layer chickens doubled from about 200 grams to around 480 grams within fortnights. By 45 days of chicken’s age, meat chicken recorded at about 2500 grams of weight, while the layer chicken grew to over 500 grams. The average weight for meat chicken was higher than that of layer chicken. The weight of meat chicken was initially big which was recorded at about 150 grams in 8 days in comparison to just 5 grams for layer chickens. By 20st days, the mean weight of meat chicken rose to over 500 grams compared to about 100 grams for layer chickens. At the age of 45, meat chicken reached at the average weight of over 2000 grams, whereas layer chicken reached at over 500 grams.
Overall
, the
average
weight
for
meat
chicken and
layer
chicken rose as the
age
of the chickens increased,
especially
after a month; the
weight
of both chickens
grew
significantly
. The
average
weight
for the
meat
chicken is higher than that of
layer
chickens.

Both chicken types
grew
in its mean
weight
significantly
as the
age
is matured
,
in particular
after 34 days, where the
average
weight
grew
substantially
for
meat
chickens. The
meat
chicken tripled its
weight
from
over
500
grams
in 20th days to
over
1500
grams
within fortnights, whereas the
weight
of
layer
chickens doubled from about 200
grams
to around 480
grams
within fortnights. By 45 days of chicken’s
age
,
meat
chicken recorded at about 2500
grams
of
weight
, while the
layer
chicken
grew
to
over
500 grams.

The
average
weight
for
meat
chicken was higher than that of
layer
chicken. The
weight
of
meat
chicken was
initially
big
which
was recorded
at about 150
grams
in 8 days
in comparison
to
just
5
grams
for
layer
chickens. By 20st days, the mean
weight
of
meat
chicken rose to
over
500
grams
compared to about 100
grams
for
layer
chickens. At the
age
of 45,
meat
chicken reached at the
average
weight
of
over
2000
grams
, whereas
layer
chicken reached at
over
500
grams
.
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IELTS academic The Graph below shows the averaged results for one of the two school trials, illustrating the substantial difference in growth rate between egg chickens and meat chickens. v. 2

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