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The Graph below shows the averaged results for one of the two school trials, illustrating the substantial difference in growth rate between egg chickens and meat chickens. v.2

The Graph below shows the averaged results for one of the two school trials, illustrating the substantial difference in growth rate between egg chickens and meat chickens. v. 2
Overall, the average weight for meat chicken and layer chicken rose as the age of the chickens increased, especially after a month; the weight of both chickens grew significantly. The average weight for the meat chicken is higher than that of layer chickens. Both chicken types grew in its mean weight significantly as the age is matured, in particular after 34 days, where the average weight grew substantially for meat chickens. The meat chicken tripled its weight from over 500 grams in 20th days to over 1500 grams within fortnights, whereas the weight of layer chickens doubled from about 200 grams to around 480 grams within fortnights. By 45 days of chicken’s age, meat chicken recorded at about 2500 grams of weight, while the layer chicken grew to over 500 grams. The average weight for meat chicken was higher than that of layer chicken. The weight of meat chicken was initially big which was recorded at about 150 grams in 8 days in comparison to just 5 grams for layer chickens. By 20st days, the mean weight of meat chicken rose to over 500 grams compared to about 100 grams for layer chickens. At the age of 45, meat chicken reached at the average weight of over 2000 grams, whereas layer chicken reached at over 500 grams.
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, the
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weight
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meat
chicken and
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layer
chicken rose as the
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age
of the chickens increased,
especially
after a month; the
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weight
of both chickens
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grew
significantly
. The
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average
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weight
for the
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meat
chicken is higher than that of
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layer
chickens.

Both chicken types
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grew
in its mean
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weight
significantly
as the
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age
is matured
,
in particular
after 34 days, where the
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average
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weight
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grew
substantially
for
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meat
chickens. The
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meat
chicken tripled its
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weight
from
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over
500
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grams
in 20th days to
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over
1500
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grams
within fortnights, whereas the
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weight
of
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layer
chickens doubled from about 200
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grams
to around 480
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grams
within fortnights. By 45 days of chicken’s
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age
,
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meat
chicken recorded at about 2500
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grams
of
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weight
, while the
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layer
chicken
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grew
to
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over
500 grams.

The
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average
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weight
for
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meat
chicken was higher than that of
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layer
chicken. The
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weight
of
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meat
chicken was
initially
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which
was recorded
at about 150
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grams
in 8 days
in comparison
to
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just
5
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grams
for
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layer
chickens. By 20st days, the mean
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weight
of
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meat
chicken rose to
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over
500
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grams
compared to about 100
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grams
for
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layer
chickens. At the
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age
of 45,
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meat
chicken reached at the
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average
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weight
of
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over
2000
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grams
, whereas
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layer
chicken reached at
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over
500
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grams
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The Graph below shows the averaged results for one of the two school trials, illustrating the substantial difference in growth rate between egg chickens and meat chickens. v. 2

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6.5
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