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The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
Given is the bar chart which compares the structure of teaching staff categorized by gender in six various types of educational settings in the UK in the year 2010. What stands out from the chart is the dominence of women in nursery and elementary schools, while the reserve is true for university. In three out of the six settings, female outnumbered male. Female teachers constituted considerately larger proportion of total teachers in low-aged settings: nursery/pre-school, primary school and secondary school. Especially, the level of female teachers was above forty times bigger than male’s in the nursery(96% and 4% respectively) and 9 times higher in primary school(92% and 8%). The gender gap became smaller in secondary school, and vanished in college. On the other hand, in general, the rate of male teachers exceeded that of female teachers in private training institute and university. In particular, the former was more than double the latter in university (roughly 70 men vs 30 women). Overall, the chart reveals that juvenile educational settings was female-dominated regarding to teaching staff; however, male had a significant presence in private training institute and university.
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Given
is the bar chart which compares the structure of teaching staff categorized by gender in six various types of educational
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settings
in the UK in the year 2010. What stands out from the chart is the
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dominence
of women in nursery and elementary
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schools
, while the reserve is true for university.

In three out of the six
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settings
,
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female
outnumbered male.
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Female
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teachers
constituted
considerately
larger proportion of total
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teachers
in low-aged
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settings
: nursery/
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pre-school
, primary
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school
and secondary
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school
.
Especially
, the level of
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female
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teachers
was above forty times bigger than male’s in the nursery(96% and 4%
respectively
) and 9 times higher in primary
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school(92%
and 8%). The gender gap became smaller in secondary
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school
, and vanished in college.

On the other hand
,
in general
, the rate of male
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teachers
exceeded that of
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female
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teachers
in private training institute and university.
In particular
, the former was more than double the latter in university (roughly 70
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men
vs 30 women).

Overall
, the chart reveals that juvenile educational
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settings
was female-dominated
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regarding to
teaching staff;
however
, male had a significant presence in private training institute and university.
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IELTS academic The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.

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