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the graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. writing a report. v.2

the graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. writing a report. v. 2
The bar chart highlights the information about the average annual gross domestic product growth in term of 3 types of countries: developed countries, developing countries adopting a global approach to business or globalizers and developing countries adopting a non-global approach to business or non-globalizers from the 1960s to the1990s. Overall, It can be observed that there was a gradual downward trend in the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries. And that of globalizers followed a contrasting trend. If we look at the average annual gross domestic product growth of wealthy countries, it started at just over 4. 5%, which meant that it was the highest percent among 3 types of countries. After that, the figure fell down steadily to nearly 3. 0% in the 1970s and continuously decreased by approximately 1. 0% in the 1990s. By contrast, the average domestic product growth of globalizers began at the lowest position compared with 2 remaining types of countries, at around 15% in the 1960s. But in the last three period of time, the figure increased significantly and reached a high of nearly 5. 0% in the 1990s. As regards non-globalizers, there was a slight increase in the two first periods of time, from nearly 2. 5% in the 1960s to just over 3. 0% in the 1970s. Following this the figure dropped considerably, making it slightly lower than the others, nearly 1. 0% in the 1980s and around 1. 5% in the 1990s.
The bar chart highlights the information about the
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: developed
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, developing
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adopting a global approach to business or
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globalizers
and developing
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non-globalizers
from the 1960s to the1990s.

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that there was a gradual downward trend in the
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growth
in
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domestic
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products
in wealthy
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. And that of
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globalizers
followed a contrasting trend.

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of wealthy
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, it
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over 4. 5%, which meant that it was the highest percent among 3 types of
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countries
. After that, the figure fell down
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to
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3. 0% in the 1970s and
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decreased by approximately 1. 0% in the 1990s. By contrast, the
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began at the lowest position compared with 2 remaining types of
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, at around 15% in the 1960s.
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5. 0% in the 1990s.

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non-globalizers
, there was a slight increase in the two
first
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2. 5% in the 1960s to
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over 3. 0% in the 1970s. Following this the figure dropped
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1. 0% in the 1980s and around 1. 5% in the 1990s.
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IELTS academic the graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. writing a report. v. 2

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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