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The diagram belows show stages in the development of simple cooking equipment Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant v.2

The diagram belows show stages in the development of simple cooking equipment
The diagram illustrates the process of improving cooking utensils. It is indicated that there are three distinct stages from the process, from the initially simple to eventually complicated equipment. At the first stage in the development of cooking equipment, there is only a simple cooking pot balanced on many stones over many twigs and grass. Moving to the second image, it shows how the equipment has improved by building a shield made of clay around the stone to protect the fire. There is also a hole that is used to put the sticks, as well as, twigs inside the shield. At the final stage of the diagram, the equipment is more complex. The clay shied is replaced with a metal one combined with a door in order for the entry of air and the flow out of ash. Above the shield, there is an equipment used to support port with handles, as well as clay lining surrounds the utensils. In the bottom, there is a grate for putting charcoal inside. In fact, cooking equipment has developed significantly to a more complicated level.
The diagram illustrates the process of improving cooking utensils. It
is indicated
that there are three distinct stages from the process, from the
initially
simple to
eventually
complicated equipment.

At the
first
stage in the development of cooking
equipment
, there is
only
a simple cooking pot balanced on
many
stones over
many
twigs and grass. Moving to the second image, it
shows
how the
equipment
has
improved
by building a shield made of clay around the stone to protect the fire. There is
also
a hole
that is
used
to put the sticks,
as well
as, twigs inside the shield.

At the final stage of the diagram, the
equipment
is more complex. The clay shied
is replaced
with a metal one combined with a door in order for the entry of air and the flow out of ash. Above the shield, there is an
equipment
used
to support port with
handles
,
as well
as clay lining surrounds the utensils. In the bottom, there is a grate for putting charcoal inside.

In fact, cooking
equipment
has developed
significantly
to a more complicated level.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagram belows show stages in the development of simple cooking equipment

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
182 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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