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The flowchart shows the impact of deforestation. Summarize the information and present relevant facts, make comparisons where relevant v.2

The flowchart shows the impact of deforestation.
Information is provided as a flowchart that illustrates resulting circumstances due to clear cutting of forests. Four different deforestation impacts are further delineated as cascading events. Overall, the process of deforestation is shown to result in two different scenarios, which are flooding and less biodiversity. The process illustrating how clear cutting of forests leads to flooding is disjoint from the other categories, which exhibit some cross-correlation. Flooding results when logging machinery compacts the ground so that the soil is hardened and water can easily run off, leading to aforementioned floods. On the other hand, eradication of trees can lead to the following three scenarios: 1) top soil is loosened due to fewer roots, 2) elevated danger of fires and 3) less moisture emitted to the environment. Even though these scenarios are initially dissimilar, they all result in less biodiversity. Scenario one results in top soil that has been eroded, degrading the vegetation as pioneer species infest the deforested site, which then impacts biodiversity negatively. Similarly, bush fires can lead to micro-organisms infestation, again diminishing biodiversity. Scenario three results in less rainfall and hence drier ground with the same outcome as scenario one.
Information
is provided
as a flowchart that illustrates resulting circumstances due to
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clear
cutting of forests. Four
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different
deforestation impacts are
further
delineated as cascading
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events
.

Overall
, the process of deforestation
is shown
to
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result
in two
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different
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scenarios
, which are flooding and
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less
biodiversity. The process illustrating how
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clear
cutting of forests leads to flooding is disjoint from the other categories, which exhibit
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some
cross-correlation.

Flooding
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results
when logging machinery compacts the ground
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so
that the soil
is hardened
and water can
easily
run off, leading to aforementioned floods.

On the other hand
, eradication of trees can lead to the following three
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scenarios
: 1) top soil
is loosened
due to fewer roots, 2) elevated
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danger
of fires and 3)
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less
moisture emitted to the environment.
Even though
these
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scenarios
are
initially
dissimilar, they all
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result
in
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less
biodiversity.

Scenario one
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results
in top soil that has
been eroded
, degrading the vegetation as pioneer species infest the deforested site, which then impacts biodiversity
negatively
.
Similarly
, bush fires can lead to micro-organisms infestation, again diminishing biodiversity.
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Scenario
three
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results
in
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less
rainfall and
hence
drier ground with the same outcome as
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scenario
one.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The flowchart shows the impact of deforestation.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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