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The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v.2

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 2
The bar chart provides information about the number of Japanese people who travel in foreign countries. Also, line graph illustrates the percentage of Japan tourist market which belongs to Australia. Figures are presented yearly, over a ten-year period, starting in 1985. Overall, both charts reveal a gradual increase both of Japan inhabitants who visited foreign countries and the percentage which Australia has in Japan. Between 1985 and 1988 the figures for Japanese travellers increased slightly for above forty million to more than double. The same trend of rise took place in case of Australia market share, but this year the figures hit a peak of approximately 4, 8%. This was followed by a dip, in 1989, which accounts for less than 4, 3%. Compared with those who decided to visit other countries, immediately after 1989, number of Japanese tourists in Australia soared reaching, in 1993, a percentage of 6, 1. After this period figures decreased to 6% in 1995, while in the same year Japan inhabitants who decided to visit foreign countries accounted for 15 million.
The bar chart provides information about the number of Japanese
people
who
travel in foreign
countries
.
Also
, line graph illustrates the percentage of
Japan
tourist market which belongs to Australia.
Figures
are presented
yearly, over a ten-year period, starting in 1985.

Overall
, both charts reveal a gradual increase both of
Japan
inhabitants
who
visited foreign
countries
and the percentage which Australia has in
Japan
. Between 1985 and 1988 the
figures
for Japanese
travellers
increased
slightly
for above forty million to more than double. The same trend of rise took place in case of Australia market share,
but
this year the
figures
hit a peak of approximately 4, 8%. This
was followed
by a dip, in 1989, which accounts for less than 4, 3%. Compared with those
who
decided to visit other
countries
, immediately after 1989, number of Japanese tourists in Australia soared reaching, in 1993, a percentage of 6, 1. After this period
figures
decreased to 6% in 1995, while in the same year
Japan
inhabitants
who
decided to visit foreign
countries
accounted for 15 million.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 2

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