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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050.
The stipulated pie diagram illustrate the ages of population in 2000 and expected predictions of 2050 in Yemen and Italy. The mentioned parameters are different age groups of 0-14, 15-59 and 60 plus people. In Yemen, in the year of 2000 majority of the population was belong to the category of 0-14 age, accounting half of the country' s total population (50. 1%). Whereas expected figures of 2050 showing a completely different trend, at that time youngsters belong to 15-59 age group will take the lead and going to account slightly more than half of the population which is 57. 3%. But the senior citizens who comes under 60 plus age group expected to rise only a very small percentage of 2. On the contrary, Italian figures showed a completely different story. The number of Italians coming under 15-59 age group was responsible for the majority of stake in the country' s total number of citizens with a figure of 61. 6% followed by the 60 plus age group (24. 1%). Surprisingly the expected population growth in the middle age category is expected to be almost the same even after the 50 years of time, but there will be slight decline of 14% in comparison with 2000 figures. There will be a drastic rise of old age people (42. 3%) is also predicted by 2050. In conclusion, it is evident from the chart there will be some shifts in the number of people in various age group of Italian and Yemenis population. But the transformation will be in completely different age category for both nations.
The stipulated pie diagram illustrate the
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ages
of
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population
in 2000 and
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expected
predictions of 2050 in Yemen and Italy. The mentioned parameters are
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different
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age
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groups
of 0-14, 15-59 and 60 plus
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people
.

In Yemen, in the year of 2000 majority of the
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population
was
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belong
to the category of 0-14
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age
, accounting half of the
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country&
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population
(50. 1%). Whereas
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expected
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figures
of 2050 showing a completely
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different
trend, at that time youngsters belong to 15-59
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age
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group
will take the lead and going to account
slightly
more than half of the
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population
which is 57. 3%.
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the senior citizens who
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comes
under 60 plus
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age
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group
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expected
to rise
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percentage of 2.

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, Italian
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showed
a completely
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story. The number of Italians coming under 15-59
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was responsible for the majority of stake in the
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#039; s total number of citizens with a
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of 61. 6% followed by the 60 plus
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age
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group
(24. 1%).
Surprisingly
the
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growth in the middle
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category is
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to be almost the same even after the 50 years of time,
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but
there will be slight decline of 14%
in comparison
with 2000
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. There will be a drastic rise of
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old
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age
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people
(42. 3%) is
also
predicted by 2050.

In conclusion
, it is evident from the chart there will be
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some
shifts in the number of
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people
in various
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age
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group
of Italian and Yemenis
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population
.
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the transformation will be in completely
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age
category for both nations.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050.

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