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The graph below shows CO<sub>2</sub> emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v.4

The graph below shows CO<sub>2</sub> emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v. 4
The column graph shows the amount of CO2 release from different means of transports in the European Union and the pie chart outlines how the European Union distributes its budget on different transportation types. In general, air transports emit the highest volume of C02, and vehicles on roads and railways together consume most of the European Union's expenditure budget on transports. To begin with, nearly 400 grams of CO2 ejection happens when a passenger travels a kilometre in an aeroplane. Following that, personal cars stand at the second position with a remarkably lower figure of CO2 emision - approximately 130 grams per passenger kilometre. Buses are responsible for 70 grams of emission while this figure is 40 grams for coaches, which is the lowest. Finally, the Maritimes and rails are reported to have the same volume of CO2 discharge, 50 grams for a kilometre travel by a passenger. As can be seen from the pie chart, more than half of the transport related expenditure by the EU goes to road transports. Nearly one-third of their total budget is spent on railways and a tenth is used for bus communications. The remaining 7% budget is then spent on other transportation types.
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the amount of CO2 release from
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different
means of
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transports
in the European Union and the pie chart outlines how the European Union distributes its
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budget
on
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different
transportation types.
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, air
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transports
emit the highest volume of C02, and vehicles on roads and railways together consume most of the European Union's expenditure
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budget
on transports.

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begin
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400
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grams
of CO2 ejection happens when a passenger travels a
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kilometre
in an
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aeroplane
. Following that, personal cars stand at the second position with a
remarkably
lower figure of CO2
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emision
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approximately 130
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grams
per passenger
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kilometre
. Buses are responsible for 70
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grams
of emission while this figure is 40
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grams
for coaches, which is the lowest.
Finally
, the
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Maritimes
and rails
are reported
to have the same volume of CO2 discharge, 50
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grams
for a
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kilometre
travel by a passenger.

As can be
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seen
from the pie chart, more than half of the
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transport
related expenditure by the EU goes to road
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transports
.
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one-third of their total
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budget
is spent
on railways and a tenth is
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used
for bus communications. The remaining 7%
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budget
is then spent on other transportation types.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows CO<sub>2</sub> emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v. 4

Academic
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3 paragraphs
200 words
6.0
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