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The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. v.4

The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. v. 4
Given are two kinds of figure concerning how much the average family spent on food in four years from 1970 to 2000. The first chart provides information about the spent on restaurant meals (in percentage), while the second one illustrates how many fast food meals and sit-down restaurant meals were in each year. The most significant point in the pie charts is that between 1970 and 2000 there was a considerable growth from one-fifth in the first year of the period to exactly a half in 2000. That is a rise of forty percent in a thirty-year period. The most striking feature to comment on in the line chart is that even though both numbers of fast food meals and sit-down meals started at the same point, a mere twenty meals, however, had two different endings. In 1980, the number of sit-down suppers rose respectively to approximately thirty-five, while the number of quickly served meals experienced a smaller increase. However, in twenty years after that, the proportion quickly reached a peak at relatively ninety, considerably forty meals more than that of sit-down restaurant meals. It is interesting to note that through more than thirty years, having meals in a restaurant whether in fast food or sit-down one has become very popular.
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Given
are two kinds of figure concerning how much the average family spent on
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food
in four years from 1970 to 2000. The
first
chart provides information about the spent on
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restaurant
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meals
(in percentage), while the second one illustrates how
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many
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fast
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food
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meals
and
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sit-down
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restaurant
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meals
were in each year.

The most significant point in the pie charts is that between 1970 and 2000 there was a considerable growth from one-fifth in the
first
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year
of the period to exactly a half in 2000.
That is
a rise of forty percent in a thirty-year period.

The most striking feature to comment on in the line chart is that
even though
both numbers of
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fast
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food
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meals
and
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sit-down
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meals
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started
at the same point, a mere twenty
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meals
,
however
, had two
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different
endings. In 1980, the number of
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sit-down
suppers rose
respectively
to approximately thirty-five, while the number of
quickly
served
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meals
experienced a smaller increase.
However
, in twenty years after that, the proportion
quickly
reached a peak at
relatively
ninety,
considerably
forty
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meals
more than that of
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sit-down
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restaurant
meals.

It is interesting to note that through more than thirty years, having
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meals
in a
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restaurant
whether in
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fast
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food
or
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sit-down
one has become
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very
popular.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. v. 4

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
211 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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