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The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. v.3

The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. v. 3
The illustration demonstrates how people’s tendency to have outside meals augmented between 1970 and 2000 and the ratio of food budget they spent on homemade food and restaurant meals. Generally speaking, people ate a higher number of outside meals over the time and their spending on that increased noticeably. As can be seen, people spend one-tenth of their food budget to dine outside in 1970 and had around 40 meals outside the home of which 20 meals were taken from fast food shops. Next decade, their expenditure ratio on homemade food declined and they spend 5% more for enjoying meals from a restaurant. In 1980, they ate approximately 60 meals at a bistro of which roughly 35 were fast food meals. Over the time, their spending ratio on restaurant meals soared and in 2000, they had around 90 fast food meals and 50 sitdown restaurant meals. It is worth noticing that this tendency swelled their food budget for cafeteria meals as they spend half of their food funds to enjoy outside meals.
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augmented between 1970 and 2000 and the ratio of
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budget they spent on homemade
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and
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over the time and their spending on that increased
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budget to dine
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the home of which 20
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shops.
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. In 1980, they ate approximately 60
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at a bistro of which roughly 35 were
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. Over the time, their spending ratio on
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soared and in 2000, they had around 90
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. It is worth noticing that this tendency swelled their
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budget for cafeteria
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as they spend half of their
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funds to enjoy
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IELTS academic The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. v. 3

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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