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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishm v.27

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishm v. 27
The line graph compares the amount of fish, lamb, beef and chicken which was consumed weekly by each person in Europe over a period 25 years, starting from 1979. Overall, the consumption of chicken increased significantly while ones of the other types of meat has opposite trend. Looking at the detail, chicken was used the most popularly in a European country. This figure boosted from nearly 150 grams in 1979 to about 250 grams in 2004. The consumption of fish declined slightly during this period and fluctuated around 50 grams each person per week. The other kinds of meat life beef and lamb witnessed a dramatically decrease in the consumption. In 1979, beef was preferred the most by inhabitants in a European country with under 225 grams per person, but this figure reduced to over 100 grams in 2004. The amount of lamb also has down trend from 150 grams to more 50 grams one person per week.
The line graph compares the amount of fish, lamb, beef and chicken which
was consumed
weekly by each
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person
in Europe over a period 25 years, starting from 1979.

Overall
, the consumption of chicken increased
significantly
while ones of the other types of meat has opposite trend.

Looking at the detail, chicken was
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used
the most
popularly
in a European country. This figure boosted from
nearly
150
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grams
in 1979 to about 250
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grams
in 2004. The consumption of fish declined
slightly
during this period and fluctuated around 50
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grams
each
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person
per week.

The other kinds of meat life beef and lamb witnessed a
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dramatically decrease
in the consumption. In 1979, beef
was preferred
the most by inhabitants in a European country with under 225
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grams
per
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person
,
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but
this figure
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reduced
to over 100
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grams
in 2004. The amount of lamb
also
has down
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trend
from 150
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grams
to more 50
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grams
one
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person
per week.
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IELTS academic Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishm v. 27

Academic
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4 paragraphs
158 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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