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The graph below shows a percentage who drank each unit group on heaviest drinking day by age group, 2014 in the UK. v.2

The graph below shows a percentage who drank each unit group on heaviest drinking day by age group, 2014 in the UK. v. 2
The graph represents the proportion of British people in four age groups (16 to 24, 25 to 44, 45 to 64, 65 and over) by drinking four distinctive units from +14 units, 7-14 units, more than 4, 67 units and below 4, 67 units in 2014. Overall, drinking up to 4, 67 units recorded the highest units for all age groups and especially for younger groups, whereas 4, 67 units of drinking was relevantly similar throughout the four distinctive age groups. Meanwhile, drinking more than 14 units and 7-14 units experienced a declining trend as the age of drunken people in the UK rose. In terms of drinking unit of up to 4, 67 had dedicated for the highest proportion for all age groups; 45% of younger age group drank up to 4, 67 units, nearly 50% for 25 to 64 years of people drank up to that limit and over 75% for people drank up to 4, 67 units of drink. Meanwhile, all age groups drank 15% of 4, 67 drinking units. In contrast, drinking of more than 14 units and 7 to 14 units witnessed the same declining trends as the drinking age increases. The highest proportion was found from the younger group of about 15% drank more than 14 units and a quarter for 7-14 units, and which decreased until the proportion of drinking had recorded at approximately 5% and 10% for more than 14 units of drinking and 7-14 units of drinking respectively for senior groups (over 65 years).
The graph represents the
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proportion
of British
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people
in four
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age
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groups
(16 to 24, 25 to 44, 45 to 64, 65 and over) by
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drinking
four distinctive
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units
from +14
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units
, 7-14
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units
, more than 4, 67
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units
and below 4, 67
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units
in 2014.

Overall
,
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drinking
up to 4, 67
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units
recorded the highest
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units
for all
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age
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groups
and
especially
for younger
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groups
, whereas 4, 67
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units
of
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drinking
was
relevantly
similar throughout the four distinctive
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age
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groups
. Meanwhile,
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drinking
more than 14
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units
and 7-14
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units
experienced a declining trend as the
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age
of drunken
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people
in the UK rose.

In terms of
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drinking
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unit
of up to 4, 67 had dedicated for the highest
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proportion
for all
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age
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groups
; 45% of younger
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age
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group
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drank
up to 4, 67
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units
,
nearly
50% for 25 to 64 years of
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people
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drank
up to that limit and over 75% for
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people
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drank
up to 4, 67
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units
of drink. Meanwhile, all
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age
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groups
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drank
15% of 4, 67
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drinking
units.

In contrast
,
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drinking
of more than 14
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units
and 7 to 14
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units
witnessed the same declining trends as the
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drinking
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age
increases. The highest
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proportion
was found
from the younger
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group
of about 15%
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drank
more than 14
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units
and a quarter for 7-14
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units
, and which decreased until the
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proportion
of
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drinking
had recorded at approximately 5% and 10% for more than 14
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units
of
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drinking
and 7-14
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units
of
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drinking
respectively
for senior
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groups
(over 65 years).
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows a percentage who drank each unit group on heaviest drinking day by age group, 2014 in the UK. v. 2

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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