The diagram illustrated the proportion of population aged 65 in 3 countries USA, Japan and Sweden during 1970 to 2040. As shown at the beginning in 1940, USA had the most proportion of population in compare of two other countries (=9%) and has gradually increased also it is predicted that the amount would be gone up by 2040, at about 25% that will be more less than two other countries.
Japan had the lowest percentage of the aged 65, and this amount was increasing just before 1990 after it, the population was increasing and diagram anticipated after 2020 with a suddenly growth will be the highest aged producer among USA and Sweden.
Sweden usually was in middle of USA and Japan. Although after 2000 it was the most important aged 65 producer but diagram describe that it will be at middle in compare to two other.
So that according to graph the percentage proportion of population aged 65 usually was accompanied with growth and will be going up until 2040 near to 25%.
The diagram illustrated the proportion of
population
aged
65 in 3 countries USA, Japan and Sweden during 1970 to 2040. As shown at the beginning in 1940, USA had the most proportion of
population
in compare of two other countries (=9%) and has
gradually
increased
also
it
is predicted
that the amount would
be gone
up by 2040, at about 25% that will be
more less
than two other countries.
Japan had the lowest percentage of the
aged
65, and this amount was increasing
just
before
1990 after it, the
population
was increasing and diagram anticipated after 2020 with a
suddenly growth
will be the highest
aged
producer
among USA
and Sweden.
Sweden
usually was
in middle
of USA
and Japan. Although after 2000 it was the most
important
aged
65 producer
but
diagram
describe
that it will be at middle in compare to two other.
So
that according to graph the percentage proportion of
population
aged
65
usually
was
accompanied with
growth and will be going up until 2040 near to 25%.
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