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The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from v.2

The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from v. 2
The given line graph illustrates the number of population of four various kinds of turtles in India between 1980 and 2012. The unit is measured in Index. It can be clearly seen from the graph that the number of Olive Ridley turtles soared within the given period of time and the figure of Leatherback Turtles gradually plummeted across the given period. To begin with, in the year 1980 the number different turtle population represented the same figure (100). After that, the number of Leatherback progressively rose up and reached to above 130 in the year 1997. Thereafter it showed fluctuations and presented the figure of the population to 130 during the year 2012. Similarly, all species showed gradual increase till 1987 (110) and following that depicted oscillation and hit figure almost 110. Green Turtles showed a downward trend. The number of Green turtles palpitated throughout the given period and the population figure reached almost 95 in the year 1989. The number of Olive Ridley Turtles presented sharp increase till 1987(110) and thereafter showed sharp decline throughout the given years and reached its number to below 60 in the year 2012, which is the least number of the population showed among turtles.
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line graph illustrates the
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number
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population
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turtles
in India between 1980 and 2012. The unit
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in Index. It can be
clearly
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seen
from the graph that the
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number
of Olive
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Ridley
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turtles
soared within the
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period of time and the
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figure
of
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Leatherback
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Turtles
gradually
plummeted across the
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period.

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with, in the
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1980 the
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different
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turtle
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population
represented the same
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figure
(100). After that, the
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Leatherback
progressively
rose up and reached to above 130 in the
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year
1997.
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it
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showed
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population
to 130 during the
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2012.

Similarly
, all species
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showed
gradual increase till 1987 (110) and following that depicted oscillation and hit
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figure
almost 110. Green
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Turtles
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showed
a downward trend. The
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number
of Green
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turtles
palpitated throughout the
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given
period and the
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population
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figure
reached almost 95 in the
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year
1989. The
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number
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Ridley
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Turtles
presented sharp increase till 1987(110) and thereafter
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showed
sharp decline throughout the
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given
years and reached its
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number
to below 60 in the
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year
2012, which is the least
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number
of the
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population
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showed
among
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turtles
.
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36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from v. 2

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