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The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from v.1

The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from v. 1
The line graph gives data on different turtle species in India between 1980 and 2012. The given turtle population index clearly states that leatherback turtles greatly reduced during the given period while the Olive Ridley species managed to increase their population in India. Analysing the illustration reveal that there were 111 turtle species in India and the 1980 turtle population index considered 100 units and in this year, all turtles in India were at unit 100. However, over the time, leatherback turtle’s number dropped significantly and reached to only 60 units while an opposite trend could be observed in the case of Olive Ridley turtles. This species continually expanded, according to the index, till 1997 and then showed some fluctuations with a sharp drop in 2012 when it was just over 120 units. Finally, the green turtle’s index indicates that a rapid oscillation was visible in the population of this turtle. Over the years, this species's population, however, slightly dropped and they were just over 90 units in 2012. The index of all turtle species did not change significantly, though there were many ups and downs in this number. The important information that the diagram provides is the number of various types of turtle species. It was 19 for leatherback turtles, 38 for green turtles and 20 for Olive Ridley.
The line graph gives data on
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species in India between 1980 and 2012. The
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leatherback
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greatly
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period while the Olive
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species managed to increase their
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in India.

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the illustration reveal that there were 111
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species in India and the 1980
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considered 100
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in India were at
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100.
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leatherback
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number dropped
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60
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, till 1997 and then
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120
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indicates that a rapid oscillation was visible in the
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of this
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90
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in 2012. The
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species did not
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, 38 for green
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from v. 1

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