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The graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. v.2

The graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. v. 2
The graph indicates how many people visited three London Museums in the year 2013, between June and September month. Overall, most visitors went to British museum compared to science and natural history museum. About 750 people visited British museum in July which is the highest while least went to science museum in the month of August. In detail, Around 600 people visited British Museum in June and increased dramatically to above 750 in July. The number slip back to 500 in August and rose gradually to about 650 in September. Despite of fluctuations the number followed increasing trend at the end of period. By contrast, Science and Natural History Museums followed decreasing trend at starting, however the value increased at the end of period. The number of people who visited Science Museum fell gradually to below 300 from 400 then it rose substantially in September. Likewise, Natural History Museum, there was a sharp drop in visitors from June to July. The number remained steadily in August and then increased consistently to 500 in September.
The graph indicates how
many
people
visited
three London
Museums
in the year 2013, between June and September month.
Overall
, most visitors went to British
museum
compared to
science
and natural history
museum
. About 750
people
visited
British
museum
in July which is the highest while least went to
science
museum
in the month of August.

In detail, Around 600
people
visited
British
Museum
in June and increased
dramatically
to above 750 in July. The
number
slip back to 500 in August and rose
gradually
to about 650 in September.
Despite of
fluctuations the
number
followed increasing trend at the
end
of period.

By contrast,
Science
and Natural History
Museums
followed decreasing trend at starting,
however
the value increased at the
end
of period. The
number
of
people
who
visited
Science
Museum
fell
gradually
to below 300 from 400 then it rose
substantially
in September.
Likewise
, Natural History
Museum
, there was a sharp drop in visitors from June to July. The
number
remained
steadily
in August and then increased
consistently
to 500 in September.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. v. 2

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