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The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005
The graph highlights data about the number of people who visited museums in three different countries, namely MET Museums (New York), Edo Museum (Tokyo), and National Museum (China), over a half-decade between 2000 and 2005. Overal, what stands out from the graph is that visitors of both MET museum and National Museum increased in numbers, whereas the number of people who visited Edo Museum fluctuated significantly over the period. Another interesting point is that Edo Museum, which had more visitors than other museums at the beginning, had fewer visitors than others in 2005. On contrary, the least popular museum in 2000, National Museum, became the most popular museum in 2005. Looking at the details, with respect to the visitors of MET Museum, it began at approximately 12 million visitors in 2000, then it plunged to just around 6 millions over the next two years until 2002. Then, the figure went up rapidly, finishing at around 14 million visitors in 2005. This trend also followed by National Museum. Despite increased steadily over the first four years until 2003, at just over 10 million people, the number of visitors then remained steady until 2004. In 2005, the figure began to rose sharply reaching nearly 16 million, which was the highest number of visitors compared to other museums. In contrast to MET Museum and National Museum, the number of people who visited Edo Museum went in the opposite direction. Having remained stable over the first two years at just under 14 million visitors until 2001, the figure then fluctuated to around 6 million by 2003. After that, despite plummeting, the figure then started to go up gradually and ended at approximately 10 million people in the last two years.
The graph highlights data about the
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a half-decade between 2000 and 2005.

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visitors
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MET
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museum
and
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National
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Museum
increased in
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numbers
, whereas the
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number
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people
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Edo
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Museum
fluctuated
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the period. Another interesting point is that
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, which had more
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visitors
than other
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museums
at the beginning, had fewer
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visitors
than others in 2005. On contrary, the least popular
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museum
in 2000,
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National
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, became the most popular
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in 2005.

Looking at the
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details
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, it began at approximately 12
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visitors
in 2000, then it plunged to
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two years until 2002. Then, the
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went up
rapidly
, finishing at around 14
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million
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visitors
in 2005. This trend
also
followed by
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National
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. Despite increased
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over
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four years until 2003, at
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10
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people
, the
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visitors
then remained steady until 2004. In 2005, the
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began to rose
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visitors
compared to other museums.

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MET
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and
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National
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Museum
, the
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people
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Edo
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went in the opposite direction. Having remained stable
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first
two years at
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under 14
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million
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visitors
until 2001, the
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figure
then fluctuated to around 6
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million
by 2003. After that, despite plummeting, the
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then
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started
to go up
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and ended at approximately 10
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million
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people
in the last two years.
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64Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005

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