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The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant. v.2

The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed.
The diagrams illustrate changes that happened in a neighborhood after a mall was built. The new mall took up space where previously there had been other things. Before the mall was built, there were two stores on Main Street-a bookstore and a shoe store. Behind the stores, there was an area of woods. Next to the woods, there was a park with a lake in the middle. Across the street from the stores and the park, there were houses along Main Street. Behind those houses were more houses along Oak Street. After the mall was built, things along Main Street looked quite different. The mall was built where the two stores, the woods, and part of the park had been before. The rest of the park was turned into a parking lot, and the lake was removed. Across the street from the mall, another parking lot was built in a place where houses had been before. The rest of the houses on Main Street and all the Houses on Oak Street did not change.
The diagrams illustrate
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changes
that happened in a neighborhood after a
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mall
was built
. The new
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mall
took up space where previously there had been other things.

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Before
the
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mall
was built
, there were two
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stores
on
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Main
Street-a bookstore and a shoe
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store
. Behind the
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stores
, there was an area of woods.
Next
to the woods, there was a
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park
with a lake in the middle. Across the
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street
from the
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stores
and the
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park
, there were
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houses
along
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Main
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Street
. Behind those
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houses
were more
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houses
along Oak Street.

After the
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mall
was built
, things along
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Main
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Street
looked quite
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different
. The
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mall
was built
where the two
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stores
, the woods, and part of the
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park
had been
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before
. The rest of the
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park
was turned
into a parking lot, and the lake
was removed
. Across the
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street
from the
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mall
, another parking lot
was built
in a place where
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houses
had been
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before
. The rest of the
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houses
on
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Main
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Street
and all the
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Houses
on Oak
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Street
did not
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change
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
174 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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