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The graph below describes rainfall statistics for Somecountry. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown. v.1

The graph below describes rainfall statistics for Somecountry. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown. v. 1
The given single line graph represents how much of a rain fell in millimetres in Somecountry throughout 12 months of 2004. In total, the lowest number of precipitation was in February with only approximately 38 millimetres. Then the number fluctuated and reached the peak in Autumn at just above 60 millimetres. After that, the trend declined. The most of the rainy days were in Summer (June to August) when the rainfall reached the highest proportion just below 60 millimetres. However, during September there was a slight decline, while in October it increased and reached a peak at approximately 60 mm. On the other hand, in the Winter there was the lowest number of rainy days - in December and January the millimetres remained the same - approximately 50, while the next month it reached the lowest of of just below 40. To sum up, the highest proportion of raining was in the time span from July to the middle of October. In contrast, the lowest number of rainfall occured in the period from February to April.
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in
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Somecountry
throughout 12 months of 2004.

In total, the
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lowest
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number
of precipitation was in February with
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only
approximately 38
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millimetres
. Then the
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number
fluctuated and
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reached
the peak in Autumn at
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just
above 60
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millimetres
. After that, the trend declined.

The most of the rainy days were in Summer (June to August) when the rainfall
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reached
the highest proportion
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just
below 60
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millimetres
.
However
, during September there was a slight decline, while in October it increased and
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reached
a peak at approximately 60 mm.
On the other hand
, in the Winter there was the
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lowest
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number
of rainy days
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-
in December and January the
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millimetres
remained the same
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-
approximately 50, while the
next
month it
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the
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lowest
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of of
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just
below 40.

To sum up, the highest proportion of raining was in the time span from July to the middle of October.
In contrast
, the
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of rainfall
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occured
in the period from February to April.
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IELTS academic The graph below describes rainfall statistics for Somecountry. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown. v. 1

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