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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.4

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
The above line graph interprets the changes in the amount and type of 3 different fast food consumed by Australian teenagers over a period of 25 years starting from 1975. Having analysed given information 2 types of trends could be identified with regard to all 3 types of fast food intake such as upward and downward. Pizza intake has increased over 25 years and reached its peak at around 82 times per year in 2000 from 5 times a year in 1975. At the same time Hamburgers consumption which stood at the same as Pizza in 1975 has shown a drastic increase as it has gone up to 100 times per year in 2000. Whereas Fish and Chips intake which was at 100 times per year in 1975 has reduced by 60% in 2000. Though it showed a slight incline by 10 times in 1985 when compared to previous year, it has started to drop from next year onward. It can be concluded that, fast food consumption towards Pizza and Hamburgers is having an upward trend and Fish and Chips consumption is having a downward trend.
The above line graph interprets the
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in the amount and type of 3
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food consumed by Australian
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teenagers
over a period of 25 years starting from 1975.

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analysed
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information 2 types of trends could
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with regard to all 3 types of
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fast
food intake such as upward and downward. Pizza intake has increased over 25 years and reached its peak at around 82
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times
per
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year
in 2000 from 5
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a
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year
in 1975. At the same
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Hamburgers
consumption which stood at the same as Pizza in 1975 has shown a drastic increase as it has gone up to 100
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times
per
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year
in 2000. Whereas Fish and Chips intake which was at 100
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times
per
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year
in 1975 has
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reduced
by 60% in 2000. Though it
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showed
a slight incline by 10
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times
in 1985 when compared to previous
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year
, it has
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started
to drop from
next
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onward.

It can
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that,
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food consumption towards Pizza and Hamburgers is having an upward trend and Fish and Chips consumption is having a downward trend.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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