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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v.5

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 5
The provided graph and table data reveals information about the usage of water in all around the world and also compares the water consumption, population and irrigated lands in Brazil and Congo. Firstly, it can be stated that water was mainly used by three major sectors which were agriculture, industrial and domestic sectors. Secondly, Brazilian citizens consumed more water than the people of Congo did. According to the line graph data, the irrigational need for water was dominance world widely. This consumption was around 500 Km3 in 1990; however, it increased sharply to approximately 3000 Km3 in 2000. The amount of industrial water consumption and domestic water usage were almost similar in 1990. Both of these water consumptions steadily remained sample until in 1950. After that, industrial sector consumed water more rapidly to over than 1000 Km3 in 2000.   After 1970 the domestic needs for water increased but the highest consumption of water was in the agriculture sector. The table depicts that, Brazil had far more population (176 million) than that of Congo (5. 2 million). Irrigated land in Brazil was 25, 500 square km while it was only 100 square km in Congo. Finally, the water consumption by Brazilian was 359 cubic meters per person compared to only 8 cubic meters by each citizen of Congo.
The provided graph and table data reveals information about the usage of
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in all around the world and
also
compares the
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consumption
, population and irrigated lands in Brazil and Congo.

Firstly
, it can
be stated
that
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was
mainly
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used
by three major sectors which were agriculture, industrial and domestic sectors.
Secondly
, Brazilian citizens consumed more
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than the
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people
of Congo did.

According to the line graph data, the
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irrigational
need for
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was dominance world
widely
. This
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consumption
was around 500 Km3 in 1990;
however
, it increased
sharply
to approximately 3000 Km3 in 2000. The amount of industrial
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water
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consumption
and domestic
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usage were almost similar in 1990. Both of these
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water
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consumptions
steadily
remained sample until in 1950. After that, industrial sector consumed
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more
rapidly
to over than 1000 Km3 in 2000.
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After 1970 the domestic needs for
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increased
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but
the highest
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consumption
of
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water
was in the agriculture sector.

The table depicts that, Brazil had far more population (176 million) than that of Congo (5. 2 million). Irrigated land in Brazil was 25, 500 square km while it was
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only
100 square km in Congo.
Finally
, the
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consumption
by Brazilian was 359 cubic meters per person compared to
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only
8 cubic meters by each citizen of Congo.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 5

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218 words
6.0
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