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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v.4

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 4
The line graph and table demonstrate the trends of the global water use in three different sectors from 1900 to 2000 and compares the water usage in Congo and Brazil in 2001. There was an overall upward trend in water use in these three sectors over this period. Water consumption in Brazil was much higher than that of Congo. Consuming water in agriculture, industrial and domestic fields all increased dramatically during this time. The figures for agriculture show the most significant changes of all. Between 1900 and 1950 its quantity rose to around 1, 000 km3 and then there was a sudden rise of 2, 000 km3 in 2000. The patterns of industrial and domestic water consumption were very similar to each other. Starting at almost 100 and 50 km3 respectively in 1900 and had remained nearly constant until 1950. After that, the former jumped noticeably to around 110 km3 in 2000. Likewise, the later saw a significant peak, rising by nearly 5 times (from approximately 50 to 250 km3) at the same time. It is clearly seen from the table that the water consumption in Brazil, which had 176 million people, was significantly higher than that of Congo in spite of lower population in Congo (5. 2 million), which had 265 times as less space as Brazil had.
The line graph and table demonstrate the trends of the global
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in three
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different
sectors from 1900 to 2000 and compares the
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usage in Congo and Brazil in 2001. There was an
overall
upward trend in
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in these three sectors over this period.
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consumption in Brazil was much higher than that of Congo.

Consuming
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in agriculture, industrial and domestic fields all increased
dramatically
during this time. The figures for agriculture
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the most significant
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changes
of all. Between 1900 and 1950 its quantity rose to around 1, 000 km3 and then there was a sudden rise of 2, 000 km3 in 2000. The patterns of industrial and domestic
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consumption were
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very
similar to each other. Starting at almost 100 and 50 km3
respectively
in 1900 and had remained
nearly
constant until 1950. After that, the former jumped
noticeably
to around 110 km3 in 2000.
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, the
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later
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a significant peak, rising by
nearly
5 times (from approximately 50 to 250 km3) at the same time.

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seen
from the table that the
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consumption in Brazil, which had 176 million
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people
, was
significantly
higher than that of Congo
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in spite of
lower population in Congo (5. 2 million), which had 265 times as less space as Brazil had.
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IELTS academic The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 4

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