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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v.3

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 3
The given graph shows the water consumption in different sectors and how water usage changes rapidly from 1900 to 2000. It also compares the consumption of water in the agriculture sector in two different countries according to their population. Throughout the century, the highest water consumption could be observed in agricultural sector respectively which was initially 500 km³ and rose steadily approximately to 3000 km³ respectively. Usage of water recorded at a minimal level in 1900 and it remained same in half of the century. In 1950 and onwards, water consumption in industrial sector grew significantly to over 1000 km³ while in domestic sector slightly increment in water usages can be seen which was about only 300 km³. The given table illustrates the water consumption in different areas of the world. Irrigated land in Brazil was 26, 500 km2 with the population of 176 million and water consumption per person was 359 m³ whereas D. R. C possesses 100 km2 irrigated land with the lowest number of population (only 5. 2 million) and they consumed 8 m³  water per person respectively. Moreover, Brazil consumed more water while Congo consumed less water in irrigated lands.
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sectors
and how
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usage
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changes
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in the agriculture
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sector
in two
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different
countries according to their population.

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consumption
could
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in agricultural
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sector
respectively
which was
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500 km³ and rose
steadily
approximately to 3000 km³
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. Usage of
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recorded at a minimal level in 1900 and it remained same in half of the century. In 1950 and onwards,
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water
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consumption
in industrial
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sector
grew
significantly
to over 1000 km³ while in domestic
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slightly
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usages can be
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300 km³.

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in
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different
areas of the world. Irrigated land in Brazil was 26, 500 km2 with the population of 176 million and
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water
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consumption
per person was 359 m³ whereas D. R. C possesses 100 km2 irrigated land with the lowest number of population (
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only
5. 2 million) and they consumed 8 m³
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per person
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.
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, Brazil consumed more
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while Congo consumed less
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in irrigated lands.
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IELTS academic The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 3

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3 paragraphs
194 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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