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Many people think regions affect successful persons. What is your opinion about native regions and accomplished person influence on the regions they belong to v.2

Many people think regions affect successful persons. What is your opinion about native regions and accomplished person influence on the regions they belong to v. 2
There can be many factors behind a successful person but upbringing and surrounding are main factors with which person can make his journey easy and successful. We will discuss both positive and negative influences of regions on any person growth. To start with, a person who live in good society and attend proper schooling in his or her early days can be assured to get into right path and become successful in his life. Environment and native places play a key role in bringing out confidence, patience and fighting skills in any person. Native place also play a vital role in defining the attitude of a person for example one who lives in village on his early days and then move to metro cities, can handle things much easier and confidently than who lives in metro cities and due to any reason has to move to rural areas. On other side spending times in different regions with different communities and different type of people definitely nourish leadership quality of person and confidence to lead groups of people. Mahatma Gandhi who was great Indian leader is an example who travelled a lot and spent time among number of communities and groups and finally lead the India to Freedom. To conclude, regions can be one factor like many others to make a person successful but definitely can not be only thing with which a person can become successful.
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factors behind a
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successful
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person
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upbringing and surrounding are main factors with which
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person
can
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make
his journey easy and
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successful
. We will discuss both
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positive
and
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negative
influences of regions on any
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person
growth.

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with, a
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person
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who
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live
in
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good
society and attend proper schooling in
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his or her
early days can
be assured
to
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get
into right path and become
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successful
in his life. Environment and native places play a key role in bringing out confidence, patience and fighting
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skills
in any
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person
. Native place
also
play a vital role in defining the attitude of a
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person
for example
one
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who
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lives
in village on his early days and then
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move
to metro cities, can handle things much easier and
confidently
than
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who
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lives
in metro cities and due to any reason
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has to
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move
to rural areas.

On other side spending times in
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different
regions with
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communities and
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different
type of
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people
definitely nourish leadership quality of
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person
and confidence to lead groups of
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people
. Mahatma Gandhi
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who
was great Indian leader is an example
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who
travelled a lot and spent time among number of communities and groups and
finally
lead the India to Freedom.

To conclude
, regions can be one factor like
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many
others to
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make
a
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person
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successful
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but
definitely can not be
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only
thing with which a
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person
can become
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successful
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic Many people think regions affect successful persons. What is your opinion about native regions and accomplished person influence on the regions they belong to v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
236 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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