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The flowchart below shows the process involved in completing the work experience requirement for university students. v.2

The flowchart below shows the process involved in completing the work experience requirement for university students. v. 2
The given flowchart presents the steps required to complete the requirements for work experience of the university students. As is presented in the flowchart, there are six steps involved in fulfilling the requirements starting from the Application submission till submitting the final report and after a student successfully complete these steps, s/he would be awarded the necessary credits. As is presented in the flowchart, the first step of the process is called ‘Application’ that requires a student to choose a suitable and potential workspace and to arrange the interview to submit the application in the fields s/he is interested in. The next step involves the approval stage where a student needs to be accepted and then s/he needs to submit the acceptance letter to a professor for approval. After that, the student is required to make a schedule to work for more than 10 hours per week for more than 20 weeks.   In the fourth stage, the candidate has to fulfil the weekly work report and submit to the corresponding professor each Friday. In the Evaluation step, the candidate will participate in the evaluation meeting in the final week of his/ her work with the work supervisor and the supervisor would submit the evaluation form. In the final step, known as ‘Final Report’, the candidate has to submit the final report before the last week of spring semester. And with the submission of final report, the work experience requirements are fulfilled according to the process described in the flowchart.
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required to complete the requirements for
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work
experience of the university
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students
. As
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in the flowchart, there are six
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steps
involved in fulfilling the requirements starting from the Application submission till submitting the
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final
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report
and after a
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student
successfully
complete these
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steps
, s/he would
be awarded
the necessary credits.

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is presented
in the flowchart, the
first
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step
of the process
is called
‘Application’ that requires a
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student
to choose a suitable and potential workspace and to arrange the interview to
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submit
the application in the fields s/he
is interested
in. The
next
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step
involves the approval stage where a
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student
needs to be
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accepted
and then s/he needs to
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submit
the acceptance letter to a professor for approval. After that, the
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student
is required
to
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make
a schedule to
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work
for more than 10 hours per
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week
for more than 20
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weeks
.
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In the fourth stage, the candidate
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fulfil the weekly
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report
and
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to the corresponding professor each Friday. In the Evaluation
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step
, the candidate will participate in the evaluation meeting in the
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final
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week
of his/ her
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work
with the
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supervisor and the supervisor would
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submit
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, known as
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‘Final
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Report’
, the candidate
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submit
the
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final
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report
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before
the last
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week
of spring semester. And with the submission of
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final
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report
, the
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work
experience requirements
are fulfilled
according to the process
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described
in the flowchart.
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IELTS academic The flowchart below shows the process involved in completing the work experience requirement for university students. v. 2

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
250 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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