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The flowchart below shows the process involved in completing the work experience requirement for university students. v.1

The flowchart below shows the process involved in completing the work experience requirement for university students. v. 1
The flow chart shows steps involved in gaining work experience before completing the graduation by university students to succeed in getting their first job. Due to this, some university insists all students must complete a work experience requirement to be awarded with credits after submission of the final report. The initial stage is called Application and a student, in this stage, picks some approved workplaces and submit applications to his preferred workplaces. The next stage is Approval stage and if a student gets an acceptance letter from an office, he then needs to submit it to the professor for approval. The third stage, which is known as Schedule, requires the approved students to arrange his work schedule which should be at least ten hours per week over twenty weeks. The report is the 4th step and this stage requires a pupil to submit the report form every Friday to the professor. The fifth stage is Evaluation and takes place during the final work week and a student meets the work supervisor who based on the report and meeting submits an Evaluation form. In the final stage, which is called Final Report, a student requires submitting the final report before the last week of spring term. By following these steps and subsequently submitting the final report, the pupil receives credit from the university.
The flow chart
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shows
steps involved in gaining
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work
experience
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before
completing the graduation by university
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students
to succeed in getting their
first
job. Due to this,
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some
university insists all
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students
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must
complete a
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work
experience requirement to
be awarded
with credits after submission of the
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final
report.

The initial
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stage
is called
Application and a
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student
, in this
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stage
, picks
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some
approved workplaces and
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submit
applications to his preferred workplaces. The
next
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stage
is Approval
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stage
and if a
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student
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gets
an acceptance letter from an office, he then needs to
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submit
it to the professor for approval.
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The
third
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stage
, which
is known
as Schedule, requires the approved
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students
to arrange his
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work
schedule which should be at least ten hours per
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week
over twenty
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weeks
.
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The
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report
is the 4th step and this
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stage
requires a pupil to
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submit
the
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report
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form
every Friday to the professor.
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The
fifth
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stage
is Evaluation and takes place during the
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final
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work
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week
and a
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student
meets the
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work
supervisor who based on the
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report
and meeting
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submits
an Evaluation form. In the
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final
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stage
, which
is called
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Final
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Report
, a
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student
requires submitting the
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final
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report
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before
the last
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week
of spring term.

By following these steps and
subsequently
submitting the
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final
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report
, the pupil receives credit from the university.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic The flowchart below shows the process involved in completing the work experience requirement for university students. v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
222 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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