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The diagrams show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power. v.1

The diagrams show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power. v. 1
The diagrams show the structure and processes of generating electricity from the wave power. As is observed from the presented illustration, the wave is used to produce the electricity and both the tide and ebb the structure is used to rotate a turbine to produce the electricity. According to the given pictorial, the electricity producing machine works in two ways. Firstly, the structure is placed near a sea so that the wave water gets inside the chamber and creates an air pressure that would rotate the turbine placed inside a column. The rotation of the turbine produces electricity which is stored in the cells and this electricity can be passed and used. The whole structure is placed near the sea, adjacent to a cliff or sea wall. The second illustration depicts how the electricity can be produced using the ebb tide of the sea. During the ebb, the water gets off from the chamber and the air pressure is created again from the opposite direction and this rotates the turbine. The rotation of the turbine produces electricity and supplies it to the storage. In summary, the electricity can be produced using a structure near the sea and both the tide and the ebb-tide is used to rotate the turbine to produce the electricity.
The diagrams
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show
the
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structure
and processes of generating
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electricity
from the wave power. As
is observed
from the presented illustration, the wave is
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used
to
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produce
the
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electricity
and both the tide and ebb the
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structure
is
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used
to
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rotate
a
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turbine
to
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produce
the electricity.

According to the
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given
pictorial, the
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electricity
producing machine works in two ways.
Firstly
, the
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structure
is placed
near a
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sea
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so
that the wave water
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gets
inside the chamber and creates an air pressure that would
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rotate
the
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turbine
placed inside a column. The rotation of the
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turbine
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produces
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electricity
which
is stored
in the cells and this
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electricity
can
be passed
and
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used
. The whole
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structure
is placed
near the
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sea
, adjacent to a cliff or
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sea
wall.

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The
second illustration depicts how the
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electricity
can
be produced
using the ebb tide of the
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sea
. During the ebb, the water
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gets
off from the chamber and the air pressure
is created
again from the opposite direction and this
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rotates
the
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turbine
. The rotation of the
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turbine
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produces
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electricity
and supplies it to the storage.

In summary, the
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electricity
can
be produced
using a
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structure
near the
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sea
and both the tide and the ebb-tide is
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used
to
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rotate
the
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turbine
to
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produce
the
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electricity
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagrams show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power. v. 1

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
213 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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