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The flow chart shows the detailed process of using digital technology to produce digital pictures, including the role of digital camera, smart card, computer and finally the photo printer. v.2

The flow chart shows the detailed process of using digital technology to produce digital pictures, including the role of digital camera, smart card, computer and finally the photo printer. v. 2
The flow chart show the process of producing digital technology to produce photographs. Overall, it was clearly evident that the taking photograph using digital equipment has three major stages with several substances. The process commence with capturing image and end at greeting the photo. To embark with, digital camera through capture the images. After that, photos are recorded in smart card. Following this, this kind of images and recording videos are downloaded in internal storage. Subsequently, computer through all the photos are edit like cutting enhancing and it is put in new format. Next, this format is send via emails. Consequently, those are stored in hard disk. Then, photo paper through printer is start and work is on. In next step, there are two kind of photo copies available. Additionally, the first is color copy and the second is black and white copies. Lastly, grey scale is used in normal copies(black and white).
The flow chart
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show
the process of producing digital technology to produce photographs.

Overall
, it was
clearly
evident that the taking photograph using digital equipment has three major stages with several substances. The process commence with capturing image and
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end
at greeting the photo.

To embark with, digital camera through capture the images. After that,
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photos
are recorded
in smart card. Following this, this kind of images and recording videos
are downloaded
in internal storage.
Subsequently
, computer through all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
photos
are edit like cutting enhancing and it
is put
in new format.

Next
, this format is
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send
via emails.
Consequently
, those
are stored
in
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hard
disk. Then,
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photo
paper through printer is
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start
and work is on. In
next
step, there are two
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kind
of
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photo
copies available.
Additionally
, the
first
is color copy and the second is black and white copies.
Lastly
,
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grey
scale is
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used
in normal copies(black and white).
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic The flow chart shows the detailed process of using digital technology to produce digital pictures, including the role of digital camera, smart card, computer and finally the photo printer. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
153 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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