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The chart shows the price in Euros of 800 grams of four types of bread in one European country from 2001 to 2006 v.2

The chart shows the price in Euros of 800 grams of four types of bread in one European country from 2001 to 2006 v. 2
Depicted by graph is the information about the price changes (in Euros) of 800 grams of four different bread kinds in an European country over a half decade, since 2001. Overall, it can be seen that the general trend was for the price of four kinds of bread relatively to increase throughout the time scale. The figures for Brown, White, and Riye showed a similar number by 2001, at 0. 6. After 2001, there was a dramatic increase for the the level of Brown and White, soaring to 1. 6 and just over 1. 2 each, while the latter dropped slightly by 0. 1 in 2002, after which the price soared to just above 0. 6 at the end of period. On the other hand, the price of Wholegrain remained stable during the timeline, where it stood at 0. 8 by at the beginning of period. Afterwards, although reaching a peak at 1. 8 a year later –the highest figure shown- the level eventually fell back to the initial number (0. 8) by 2006.
Depicted by graph is the information about the
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price
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changes
(in Euros) of 800 grams of four
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different
bread kinds in
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an
European country over a half decade, since 2001.

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, it can be
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seen
that the general trend was for the
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price
of four kinds of bread
relatively
to increase throughout the time scale.

The figures for Brown, White, and
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Riye
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showed
a similar number by 2001, at 0. 6. After 2001, there was a dramatic increase for
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the the
level of Brown and White, soaring to 1. 6 and
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over 1. 2 each, while the latter dropped
slightly
by 0. 1 in 2002, after which the
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price
soared to
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just
above 0. 6 at the
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end
of period.

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, the
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price
of Wholegrain remained stable during the timeline, where it stood at 0. 8 by at the beginning of period. Afterwards, although reaching a peak at 1. 8 a year later –the highest figure shown- the level
eventually
fell back to the initial number (0. 8) by 2006.
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IELTS academic The chart shows the price in Euros of 800 grams of four types of bread in one European country from 2001 to 2006 v. 2

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174 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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