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The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100, 000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. v.3

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100, 000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. v. 3
The supplied charts depict an outcome of a survey conducted among 100, 000 people and the survey asks the reason behind the journey and preferred destinations between the periods of 1994 and 1998. In the first graph, in 1994, the holiday was the most significant reason behind the United Kingdom citizen's travel and it accounted 15. 246 people whereas, 982 people were traveled because of unspecified reasons. Interestingly, in the case of business and visit to friends and relatives, almost an equal number of people visited 3115 and 2689 respectively. In the number of holiday goers, though, there was a slight decrease in the figure in 1995, rest of the years there was a gradual increase in the account and reached above 20 thousand. In spite of some downward trends in the initial year (1995), there was a marginal increase in all the categories. From the year 1994 to 1998, it is clearly seen the trend that North America and other areas obtained a rock bottom position with less than 2000 people. On the contrary, the number of visitors to Europe at a zenith level with around 20, 000 per year, besides it showed a gradual hike in the total number of visitors to all the three destinations.
The supplied charts depict an outcome of a survey conducted among 100, 000
people
and the survey asks the reason behind the journey and preferred destinations between the periods of 1994 and 1998.

In the
first
graph, in 1994, the holiday was the most significant reason behind the United Kingdom citizen's travel and it accounted 15. 246
people
whereas, 982
people
were traveled
because
of unspecified reasons.
Interestingly
, in the case of business and visit to friends and relatives, almost an equal
number
of
people
visited 3115 and 2689
respectively
. In the
number
of holiday goers, though, there was a slight decrease in the figure in 1995, rest of the years there was a gradual increase in the account and reached above 20 thousand.
In spite of
some
downward trends in the initial
year
(1995), there was a marginal increase in all the categories.

From the
year
1994 to 1998, it is
clearly
seen
the trend that North America and other areas obtained a rock bottom position with less than 2000
people
.
On the contrary
, the
number
of visitors to Europe at a zenith level with around 20, 000 per
year
,
besides
it
showed
a gradual hike in the total
number
of visitors to all the three destinations.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100, 000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. v. 3

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