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The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100, 000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. v.2

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100, 000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. v. 2
The provided charts show the data of a survey conducted on 100, 000 people and the statistics shows the number of UK citizen travelled abroad during 1994 to 1998 for different purposes and their destinations. As is observed from the given graphs, most of the UK residents travelled on their holidays and Western Europe was their most favourite destination. Initially, in 1994, more than 22 thousand UK resident traveled different foreign countries and among them, more than 15 thousand went on their holidays. For business tours, more than 3 thousand people travelled in other countries in the same year while more than 2 thousand people visited their friends and relatives. After 1 year, this number slightly decreased and for the rest of the years until 1998, the number steadily increased in almost all of the categories. Finally, in 1998, the total traveler number reached to more than 28 thousand and among them, more than twenty thousand people travelled to enjoy their holidays. In 1994, almost 18 thousand people out of 22 thousand went to Western Europe which is significantly larger than the number of people traveled to North America and other parts of the world. The similar trends can be observed for the remaining years and the majority people of the UK went to Western Europe which makes this place the most popular tourist’s destination of UK people.
The provided charts
show
the data of a survey conducted on 100, 000
people
and the statistics
shows
the
number
of UK citizen
travelled
abroad during 1994 to 1998 for
different
purposes and their destinations. As
is observed
from the
given
graphs, most of the UK residents
travelled
on their holidays and Western Europe was their most
favourite
destination.

Initially
, in 1994, more than 22 thousand UK resident traveled
different
foreign countries and among them, more than 15 thousand went on their holidays. For business tours, more than 3 thousand
people
travelled
in other countries in the same
year
while more than 2 thousand
people
visited their friends and relatives. After 1
year
, this
number
slightly
decreased and for the rest of the years until 1998, the
number
steadily
increased in almost
all of the
categories.
Finally
, in 1998, the total traveler
number
reached to more than 28 thousand and among them, more than twenty thousand
people
travelled
to enjoy their holidays.

In 1994, almost 18 thousand
people
out of 22 thousand went to Western Europe which is
significantly
larger than the
number
of
people
traveled to North America and other parts of the world. The similar trends can
be observed
for the remaining years and the majority
people
of the UK went to Western Europe which
makes
this place the most popular tourist’s destination of UK
people
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100, 000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
228 words
6.0
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