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The figure gives information about smoking habits of the UK population by age. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Write an essay based on this task v.2

The figure gives information about smoking habits of the UK population by age.
The bar chart compares the data about the patterns of smoking habits of the UK residents and the comparisons have been done by age group. Overall, the majority of people who have never smoked belong to the age group of 16-24 and the least number of people from the age group of 65-74 are people those have never smoked. As can be seen from the pie chart, almost two-thirds of young people below 24 years of age have never smoked in their life. However, as people grow, the numbers of people who have never smoked start getting reduced. Therefore, in the age category of 65-74 years, the number of people who have never smoked is the least. Another glaring feature the pie chart presents is that there are more numbers of people who start quitting smoking as they grow older especially after they attain the age group of 45-54. Therefore, the ex-smokers, the people who have stopped smoking, keep on rising significantly in each age group after they are older than 54. For example, when people are in the age bracket of 45-54, there are only 10% ex-smokers. The figures get more than doubled (almost 25%) when people are within the age group of 55-64. This trend continues and the maximum number of people who have given up smoking are older than 65. In this group of 65-74, almost 40% people can be seen as those who used to smoke earlier but do not smoke any more. The number of heavy smoker has risen in each age category and has reached the high of almost 15% when people are in the age bracket of 45-54 but thereafter, it has fallen gradually. The similar trend can be observed even in case of light smokers after they reach the age of 45 and thereafter.
The bar chart compares the data about the patterns of
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smoking
habits of the UK residents and the comparisons have
been done
by
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age
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group
.
Overall
, the majority of
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people
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who
have never
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smoked
belong to the
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age
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group
of 16-24 and the least
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number
of
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people
from the
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age
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group
of 65-74 are
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people
those have never smoked.

As can be
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seen
from the pie chart,
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almost
two-thirds of young
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people
below 24 years of
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age
have never
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smoked
in their life.
However
, as
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people
grow, the
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numbers
of
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people
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who
have never
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smoked
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start
getting
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reduced
.
Therefore
, in the
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age
category of 65-74 years, the
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number
of
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people
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who
have never
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smoked
is the least.

Another glaring feature the pie chart presents is that there are more
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numbers
of
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people
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who
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start
quitting
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smoking
as they grow older
especially
after they attain the
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age
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group
of 45-54.
Therefore
, the ex-smokers, the
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people
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who
have
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stopped
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smoking
,
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keep
on rising
significantly
in each
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age
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group
after they are older than 54.
For example
, when
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people
are in the
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age
bracket of 45-54, there are
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only
10% ex-smokers. The figures
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get
more than doubled
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(almost
25%) when
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people
are within the
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age
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group
of 55-64. This trend continues and the maximum
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number
of
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people
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who
have
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given
up
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smoking
are older than 65. In this
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group
of 65-74,
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almost
40%
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people
can be
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seen
as those
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who
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used
to smoke earlier
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but
do not smoke
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
.

The
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number
of heavy smoker has risen in each
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age
category and has reached the high of
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almost
15% when
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people
are in the
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age
bracket of 45-54
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but
thereafter, it has fallen
gradually
. The similar trend can
be observed
even in case of light smokers after they reach the
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age
of 45 and thereafter.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
58Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The figure gives information about smoking habits of the UK population by age.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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