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The diagrams below show the statges and equipment used in the cement making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where releva v.2

The diagrams below show the statges and equipment used in the cement making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
From the cement production process diagram, it can be seen that first the limestone and clay are passed through a crusher where they are converted into powder. The powder is mixed in the mixer. Powder from mixer then goes to the rotating heater, where it is rotated and heated with a heater. From the rotating heater the substance is poured into the grinder, where it becomes cement. After subtracting the cement from the grinder it is bagged. According to the concrete production diagram, the material that consists most of the components is gravel (50%), which are actually small stones. Other materials are mixed with the gravel in the concrete mixer. 25% of the materials is sand and other materials mixed are water and cement. Water consists 10% and cement consists 15% of the components of concrete. Comparing the two processes, it can be easily seen that the concrete production process is significantly simpler than cement production, although the fact that should be kept in mind is that cement is a necessary component in concrete production.
From the
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cement
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production
process diagram, it can be
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seen
that
first
the limestone and clay
are passed
through a crusher where they
are converted
into powder. The powder
is mixed
in the mixer. Powder from mixer then goes to the rotating heater, where it
is rotated
and heated with a heater. From the rotating heater the substance
is poured
into the grinder, where it becomes
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cement
.
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After
subtracting the
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cement
from the grinder it
is bagged
.

According to the concrete
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production
diagram, the
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material
that consists most of the components is gravel (50%), which are actually
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small
stones. Other
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materials
are mixed
with the gravel in the concrete mixer. 25% of the
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materials
is sand and other
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materials
mixed are water and
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cement
. Water consists 10% and
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cement
consists 15% of the components of concrete.

Comparing the two processes, it can be
easily
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seen
that the concrete
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production
process is
significantly
simpler than
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cement
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production
, although the fact that should be
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kept
in mind is that
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cement
is a necessary component in concrete
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production
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the statges and equipment used in the cement making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
175 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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