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the diagrams below show the stages and aquipment used in the cement-making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. v.2

the diagrams below show the stages and aquipment used in the cement-making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. v. 2
The supplied pictures capture several phase of cement production from the raw materials and using the particular tools. Another step showcase the cement is mixed with another content for the ingredients of construction. The first materials are limestones and clays. Both of them should be soften by crusher and it changes as a powder. The finished powder required to be mixed in order to change the texture using the heater. Second, the hot and soft powder is filtered by the grinder to be the cement as the main material. Next, it packed in a couple of bags and ready to distribute. the process continue to aim the concrete product. First, it requires some collaboration between cement and water. The contain approximate 15% and 10% respectively. To mix it, it also needs another nature contents like sand in proportion 25% and small stones 50%. After a whole things have been inserted, it directly process by the concrete mixer and deliver the new material.
The supplied pictures capture
several phase
of
cement
production from the raw
materials
and using the particular tools. Another step showcase the
cement
is mixed
with another content for the ingredients of construction.

The
first
materials
are limestones and clays. Both of them should be
soften
by crusher and it
changes
as a powder. The finished powder required to
be mixed
in order to
change
the texture using the heater. Second, the hot and soft powder
is filtered
by the grinder to be the
cement
as the main
material
.
Next
, it packed in a couple of bags and ready to distribute.

the
process continue to aim the concrete product.
First
, it requires
some
collaboration between
cement
and water.
The contain
approximate 15% and 10%
respectively
. To mix it, it
also
needs another nature contents like sand in proportion 25% and
small
stones 50%. After a whole
things
have
been inserted
, it
directly
process
by the concrete mixer and deliver the new
material
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic the diagrams below show the stages and aquipment used in the cement-making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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