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The charts below give information on the ages of people when they gotmarried in oneparticularcountry in1996 and2008. v.2

The charts below give information on the ages of people when they gotmarried in oneparticularcountry in1996 and2008. v. 2
The bar charts illustrate the percentage of residents getting married accross a range of 6 age groups according to their gender in a certain nation in 1996 and 2008. Overall, in both given years, women appeared to marry ealier than men. Besides, whereas the largest figure of females was at 25-29 age group, that of males was at 30-34. In 1996, only 1 per cent of females belonging to 16-19 age group getted married. The number increased sharply when they reached the age of 20 to 24 at 6 per cent prior to peaking at just below 12 per cent in the third age agroup. It then saw a steady decrease to just 2 per cent when they were 40 years old or more. After over a decade, the figures for females remained relatively stable. Notably, the rate of married women under 20 dropped to half of that in the previous year examined. In terms of male data, in the first years surveyed, they tended to get married when they turned 20 to 24, at just above 20 per cent. The number soared with age and reached its peak in the third and fourth age groups at approximately 9 per cent before experiencing a drop in the age of 35 or higher. Although this tendency seemed to unchange in 2008, the vast majority of males marrying fell into the fourth age group, at nearly 11 per cent, rised by 2 per cent compared to that of the year 1996.
The bar charts illustrate the percentage of residents getting married
accross
a range of 6
age
groups
according to their gender in a certain nation in 1996 and 2008.

Overall
, in both
given
years, women appeared to marry
ealier
than
men
.
Besides
, whereas the largest figure of females was at 25-29
age
group
, that of males was at 30-34.

In 1996,
only
1 per cent of females belonging to 16-19
age
group
getted
married. The number increased
sharply
when they reached the
age
of 20 to 24 at 6 per cent prior to peaking at
just
below 12 per cent in the third
age
agroup
. It then
saw
a steady decrease to
just
2 per cent when they were 40 years
old
or more. After over a decade, the figures for females remained
relatively
stable.
Notably
, the rate of married women under 20 dropped to half of that in the previous
year
examined.

In terms of male data, in the
first
years surveyed, they tended to
get
married when they turned 20 to 24, at
just
above 20 per cent. The number soared with
age
and reached its peak in the third and fourth
age
groups
at approximately 9 per cent
before
experiencing a drop in the
age
of 35 or higher. Although this tendency seemed to
unchange
in 2008, the vast majority of males marrying fell into the fourth
age
group
, at
nearly
11 per cent,
rised
by 2 per cent compared to that of the
year
1996.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The charts below give information on the ages of people when they gotmarried in oneparticularcountry in1996 and2008. v. 2

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