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The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. v.3

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. v. 3
The diagrams illustrate the life cycle process of the silkworm as well as various steps in making of silk cloth. Overall, the life cycle of silkworm has four major stages which begin with eggs and end with cocoon. Similarly, there are four main steps in the production of silk cloth commencing with boiling into the water and ending with dying process. Initially, the life cycle of silkworms starts with eggs which are laid by bees on the mulberry leaves. After this stage of the cycle, it becomes silkworm larva on mulberry leaves. It is then developed into silk thread within 4 to 6 weeks. After the last main stage of the life cycle, it is transformed into cocoons, which is necessary to make a silk cloth. In the production of silk cloths, selected cocoons are boiled into the water. Unwinding is in the second process in which 300 to 900 mm threads are produced. Eventually, it is then twisted which is helpful for making waves. Finally, the wave is ready for dye process in any colour for the final production of silk clothes.
The diagrams illustrate the
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life
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process of the silkworm
as well
as various steps in making of
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silk
cloth.

Overall
, the
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life
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cycle
of silkworm has four major stages which
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begin
with eggs and
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end
with cocoon.
Similarly
, there are four main steps in the production of
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silk
cloth commencing with boiling into the water and ending with dying process.

Initially
, the
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life
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cycle
of silkworms
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starts
with eggs which
are laid
by bees on the mulberry
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leaves
. After this stage of the
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cycle
, it becomes silkworm larva on mulberry
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leaves
. It is then developed into
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silk
thread within 4 to 6 weeks. After the last main stage of the
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life
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cycle
, it
is transformed
into cocoons, which is necessary to
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make
a
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silk
cloth.

In the production of
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silk
cloths, selected cocoons
are boiled
into the water. Unwinding is in the second process in which 300 to 900 mm threads
are produced
.
Eventually
, it is then twisted which is helpful for making waves.
Finally
, the wave is ready for dye process in any
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colour
for the final production of
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silk
clothes.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. v. 3

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4 paragraphs
183 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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