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The diagrams below show the design of a wind turbine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparison where relevant. v.2

The diagrams below show the design of a wind turbine and its location.
The given diagrams illustrate how a wind turbine is structured in order to generate electricity and its possible locations. Overall it can be seen that the device' design is simple and there are 3 potential places for their establishment. Looking at the details in the first pictorial, the apparatus comprises three blades made by fiberglass or wood which are placed on top of a steel tower. The wind blows towards the compounded blades and imprints them rotational movements which produce an output of 1. 5 megawatts throughout a generator connected to them. The sensor placed next to the blades is controlled by a computer situated not far away from the wind turbine. Due to this connection, the speed and direction are maintained within the normal range. Regarding the possible placements, there are 3 options and each has its own benefits. While a turbine mounted on the top of a hill will receive the utmost wind strengths, the one situated under the sea level does not have the same advantage but it does not affect the landscape. There is also the domestic location but this variety attains a yield of only 100 kilowatts.
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wind
turbine
is structured
in order to generate electricity and its possible locations.
Overall
it can be
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seen
that the
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Looking at the
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details
in the
first
pictorial, the apparatus comprises three blades made by fiberglass or wood which
are placed
on top of a steel tower. The
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wind
blows towards the compounded blades and imprints them rotational movements which produce an output of 1. 5 megawatts throughout a generator connected to them. The sensor placed
next
to the blades
is controlled
by a computer situated not far away from the
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wind
turbine. Due to this connection, the speed and direction
are maintained
within the normal range.

Regarding the possible placements, there are 3 options and each has its
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own
benefits. While a turbine mounted on the top of a hill will receive the utmost
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wind
strengths, the one situated under the sea level does not have the same advantage
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but
it does not affect the landscape. There is
also
the domestic location
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but
this variety attains a yield of
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only
100 kilowatts.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the design of a wind turbine and its location.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
192 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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