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The line graph below gives information about the rates of unemployment between 1991 and 2005 in three different countries in Europe. The table shows the percentage of men and women in the workforce in these three countries. v.4

The line graph below gives information about the rates of unemployment between 1991 and 2005 in three different countries in Europe. The table shows the percentage of men and women in the workforce in these three countries. v. 4
The chart illustrates the unemployment level in Italy, Germany and Spain in the year 1991 to 2005, while the table provides data on the employment proportion of men and women in three European countries in 1991. Overall, it is evident that Spain has the highest unemployment rate among the three countries for almost a decade. In addition, Spaniards has the lowest employment level in 1991 within the nation mentioned. In 1991, Spain has the top rating of unemployment with 13%increasing markedly at 18% in 1993 to 1995, and then the trend dropped reaching its lowest rate at 9% in 2005. Italians who are jobless was relevantly steady starting at 8% in 1991 and slowly rising reaching as high as 12% in 1997 to 1999 and then dropping gradually back at 8% again in 2005. In contrast, Germany started at 4% in 1991 and increasing gradually reaching 9% in 1997 and reaching over 10% margin after 2004. The employment rate of men in three different countries in 1991 was significantly higher in comparison to women. Italy has the highest proportion of men working with 77. 1% and Germany has the most number of working female with 54. 4%. Germany has the highest employment rate with the percentage of male and female combined.
The chart illustrates the unemployment level in Italy, Germany and Spain in the year 1991 to 2005, while the table provides data on the
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proportion of
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and women in three European countries in 1991.

Overall
, it is evident that Spain has the highest unemployment
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rate
among the three countries for almost a decade.
In addition
, Spaniards has the lowest
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employment
level in 1991 within the nation mentioned.

In 1991, Spain has the top rating of unemployment with 13%increasing
markedly
at 18% in 1993 to 1995, and then the trend dropped reaching its lowest
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rate
at 9% in 2005. Italians who are jobless was
relevantly
steady starting at 8% in 1991 and
slowly
rising reaching as high as 12% in 1997 to 1999 and then dropping
gradually
back at 8% again in 2005.
In contrast
, Germany
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started
at 4% in 1991 and increasing
gradually
reaching 9% in 1997 and reaching over 10% margin after 2004.

The
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rate
of
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men
in three
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different
countries in 1991 was
significantly
higher
in comparison
to women. Italy has the highest proportion of
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men
working with 77. 1% and Germany has the most number of working female with 54. 4%. Germany has the highest
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employment
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rate
with the percentage of male and female combined.
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IELTS academic The line graph below gives information about the rates of unemployment between 1991 and 2005 in three different countries in Europe. The table shows the percentage of men and women in the workforce in these three countries. v. 4

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6.5
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