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The graph below shows average of carbon dioxide (CO2)emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The graph below shows average of carbon dioxide (CO2)emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The multi line graph illustrates the information about the level of carbon dioxide who released by per person in the four various regions such as the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal in 4 decades during 1967 and 2007. In contrast, metric tonnes were measured in units. In overall, the UK constituted a major for omitting CO2 whilst least amount of carbon dioxide was spreader by Portugal. However, there were lots of transformation can be noticed in the average of per person which releasing CO2 in the all given regions over the periods. With regards to the line graph, during given fourteen year periods, the British natives were most popular for the emission of carbon dioxide per person which accounted from nearly 11 metric tonnes to above 8 metric tonnes followed by Sweden ( over one in ten metric tonnes in the beginning of the year). Likewise, Sweden showing ups and down figure and following zig zag trend sat less than 6 metric tonnes in the end of the period. The chart further proves that Italian people accounted for over a 4 metric tonnes for spreading CO2 by per person during 1967 and experienced a little less than a two fold rise to approximately 8 metric tonnes in the last decade. Lastly, the amount of per person to released carbon dioxide observed at negligible at 1% between 1967 in Portugal. After this, it started continuously increased dramatically and reached to peak level at around 6 metric tonnes in the last ten years.
The multi line graph illustrates the information about the level of
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dioxide who released by per
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person
in the four various regions such as the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal in 4 decades during 1967 and 2007.
In contrast
, metric tonnes
were measured
in units.

In
overall
, the UK constituted a major for omitting CO2 whilst least amount of
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carbon
dioxide was spreader by Portugal.
However
, there were lots of transformation can
be noticed
in the average of per
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person
which releasing CO2 in the all
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given
regions over the periods.

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the line graph, during
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given
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fourteen year
periods, the British natives were most popular for the emission of
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carbon
dioxide per
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person
which accounted from
nearly
11 metric tonnes to above 8 metric tonnes followed by Sweden
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(
over one in ten metric tonnes in the beginning of the year).
Likewise
, Sweden showing ups and down figure and following
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zig zag
trend sat less than 6 metric tonnes in the
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end
of the period.

The chart
further
proves that Italian
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people
accounted for over a 4 metric tonnes for spreading CO2 by per
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person
during 1967 and experienced a
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little
less than a
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two fold
rise to approximately 8 metric tonnes in the last decade.
Lastly
, the amount of per
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person
to released
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carbon
dioxide observed at negligible at 1% between 1967 in Portugal. After this, it
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started
continuously
increased
dramatically
and reached to peak level at around 6 metric tonnes in the last ten years.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows average of carbon dioxide (CO2)emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

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