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The diagram shows the stages and equipment used in the process of cement making and how cement is used to produce the concrete for building purposes. v.2

The diagram shows the stages and equipment used in the process of cement making and how cement is used to produce the concrete for building purposes. v. 2
The given diagram illustrates the information about procedure of cement production and concrete production by using types of equipments and distinct stages. The first diagram shows that, to produce cement first step is crashing of limestone and clay and produced powder from this is passed through a mixture. After that, the powder via rotating heater where heat is constantly given. Then, the material is passed in grinder machine for the final touch. The cement is then packed and ready to go for selling in the market. The second diagram reviews, how the concrete is produced for building work. In the first stage, 15 % cement, 10 % water, 25 % sand and 50 % stones are mixed clockwise in concrete mixture. After all this production of concrete take place.
The
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given
diagram illustrates the information about procedure of
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cement
production and concrete production by using types of equipments and distinct stages.

The
first
diagram
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shows
that, to produce
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cement
first
step is crashing of limestone and clay and produced powder from this
is passed
through a mixture. After that, the powder via rotating heater where heat is
constantly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
. Then, the material
is passed
in grinder machine for the final touch. The
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cement
is then packed and ready to go for selling in the market.

The second diagram reviews, how the concrete
is produced
for building work. In the
first
stage, 15 %
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
, 10 % water, 25 % sand and 50 % stones
are mixed
clockwise in concrete mixture.
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After
all this production of concrete take place.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the stages and equipment used in the process of cement making and how cement is used to produce the concrete for building purposes. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
129 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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